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nafebabasafari
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حالا من از 90 دانشگاه درجه یک، کورسها رو گشتم و ایمیل اساتید مرتبط رو جمع کردم اما نامه ای که میخوام بفرستم به طور جدی احتیاج به اصلاح داره چه به لحاظ محتوا و چه به لحاظ گرامری.
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Subject: Interested in doing research of religious in the modern world
Dear ..
In July, 2012, I received my M.A. degree in sociology from Tehran University, Tehran, Iran. My thesis was about “secularism in Iran after modernization process”. Result of this research and other researches that are similar is not comfortable in Iran whiles I am determined to succeed in my chosen field of “Religion and Modernity”.
I became familiar with your interests and research areas. Because of our similar interests, I’d be interested in hearing your ideas about my thesis and If there is anything I can do to further support my application please let me know.
Thank you very much for your time and attention.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely
Nafe Babasafari
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Subject: Prospective Student Interested in “Religion in the Modern World”
Dear ..
I am a M.A. graduate in Sociology (or: I am a holder of M.A degree in sociology) from Tehran University, Tehran, Iran. As my thesis project, I have worked on “Secularism in Iran after modernization process”. The results of the mentioned area of research and other similar studies are not comfortable in Iran and I am highly determined to pursue my chosen field of “Religion and Modernity”.
،Through the *, I have found your areas of research and interest to be in line with those of mine and I would be interested in hearing your ideas about my Thesis project.
I would also appreciate it if you kindly let me know about anything I can do to further support my application.
Thank you very much for your time and attention.
Looking forward to hearing from you,
Regards,
Nafe Babasafari
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