نمونه های writing کاربران و بررسی آنها

[minoosaba]

سلام عرض میکنم خدمت دوستانی که وقتشونو مثل من با نوشتن رایتینگ میگذرونن و امیدوارم نوشته هاتون هر روز بهتر از دیروز باشه
ارادت داریم خدمت خانم مینو و آقای سامان عزیز،
دوستان عزیز اگه نگاهی به رایتینگ ما بندازن ازشون بی نهایت ممنون میشم.


Why are people living longer?

It is a common phenomenon and an indisputable fact which states people are living longer in the present era rather than past. Undoubtedly, reasons to explain this opinion exceed numbers. I intend (which one is better? Intend? Am going to? Or I’d like to?) express (or explain?) three major reasons for such an incident.

In the first place, development of science and technology has been led to high-qualified living conditions. Due to better clothing, people can protect their bodies against unfavorable weather. Latterly, houses and buildings are built tenacious and well-found; as a result, when facing heat, cold, natural disasters and any other upcoming event, people can benefit all facilities to survive. Nowadays, mankind’s lifestyle has been altered entirely; people live with more welfare rather than past. They don’t migrate to different places in order to explore for food, water, shelter or safety. Using transportation facilities, people are more eager to travel to different countries and continents. On the other hand, they avoid unnecessary travels and communicate with other people around the world with ease using internet, telephone and other communication media. They have found that one must avoid smoke and drug, and eat healthy to live longer. They exercise, go vacation, do hobbies and all these together has led to a better life.

In like manner, many ordinary people and many kings like Karim-Khan-Zand have been deceased due to illnesses which are not fatal anymore. Using medical improvements (please tell me another phrase? I couldn’t find any, many thanks) scientists diagnose diseases better than ever, and cure almost every illness. In the present, they cure diseases which had been considered as fatal cases. Nowadays, we are sure that there is always a cure for almost every disease.

Coupled with, due to medical and technological improvements, people consume healthier foods. Using refrigerators and modern instruments, they can cook and eat with more sanitation (am I wrong???).


Given these points, human being is living longer rather than the past, due to Pasteurized and healthier food, improved medical treatment, living conditions and altered lifestyle which has been joint with welfare and facilities. As we could predict and announced by scientists, human life is going to live even longer in the future.

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[minoosaba]

سلام، ممنون میشم اگه دوستان انشای من رو هم یک نیگاهی بندازن و نظر بدن و بگن نمرش حدودن چنده و چیکارا کنم که تو یک هفته بهتر شه.
خیلی ممنونم

Question: Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking Web site.

Educating children is a very important issue that every parent should pay attention to it. Different people hold diverse perspective about the subject. Some believe that educating children has become more difficult with recent technologies while others disagree. In my view, new entertainment tools has made teaching kids harder than what it was before for two important reasons.

First, I think in past as they did not have many choices for entertaining themselves, they had to convince themselves that education is something interesting and as a result, parents and teachers could teach them much easier than today. For example, couple of years ago my grandmother told me about her own childhood. She described studying and reading books as one of the most interesting activities she and other kids had at that time. She said that her mother used to teach her social behavior and other stuff using Sa'di poets. She described that moments as her most brilliant events. I personally think that not only do recent technology achievements has made us so lazy, but also has made our education process more chalenging than before. As you can see, nowadays it is harder to educate children with current entertainment tools.

Second, Using such tools in the classroom has a big danger for educating students as they are now just playing games or texting via their brand new smart phones inside classes. I think these facilities have many advantages, nevertheless, their disadvantages overweighs advantages in sum situations. For instance, albeit you may google an unknown word or expression in a fraction of a second, you may miss rest of the class just because of an unrelated result presented in results. Of course this depends on the way you use such tools, but statistics has shown that majority of students misuse them and it has resulted in a great reduction on scores of students getting diploma compared to students of previous decade. Neither do students want such decrease, nor do teachers prefer it. The better results, the more inventions in the next coming decades. So, teaching people has become a major problem these days because of these tools.

Considering what has been discussed in previous paragraphs, one cannot overlook the fact that new technologies have made life easier and have many benefits, but on the other hand, it has many disadvantages that can be hazardous for humanity's progress and I hope we would solve such issues to have a better and brighter future for mankind.

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[mani_faz]

Hi everyone this is for tpo 19. Maybe no one is going to correct this one, like my other 10 writings, but I believe there is still a marginal chance.

Integrated:
The invited speaker believes that the adverse effects attributed to buzzing in the reading are totally misleading and gives the public a wrong impression. He then goes on to discuss specific reasons that make the problems mentioned in the text, unlikely to happen in reality.

First of all, although buzzers are paid by the interested companies to advertise the products, they are chosen by the companies from a pool of satisfied content customers of the product to be buzzed. So in fact, they are truly happy and content with the service they are receiving, and do not exaggerate or lie to other people about the product, they just actively advertise their inherent original satisfaction with the product. As a result, potential future customers are not being lured into buying something, by use of fraud and lies.

The point raised about the increased vulnerability and the decreased critical thinking that people might show about the possible exaggeration and hyperbole in advertisements to mislead them, when they are being buzzed, the speaker expresses the exact opposite attitude. Namely that, most of the people whom he talk to advertise the product, actually ask about a lot of detailed question and concerns, ones they wouldn't normally ask the shopkeepers, and if he doesn't have compelling answers, they will not buy the product.

On his last remark, the man asserts that the notion that buzzing would destroy social relationships by promoting a sense of general distrust because of the supposed slyness of buzzers, is a totally absurd one. This is because buzzers actually only advertise products that are of high quality, since a company with low quality products cannot possibly find already satisfied customer to become buzzers in the first place. This means, that only effective high quality products are buzzed, and consequently people who buy these products for the first time through buzzing, are also very likely to be happy about their choice, and this will in fact further strengthen the level of trust people have in social interactions.

Independent: It is better to get information and news from many different sources, to become a will-informed person.

No one is dubious about the importance that communication has had on human societies over the eons, from hunter gatherer societies who needed to inquire about possible terrains that contained valuable food resources and quarries, to modern communities in which social media play a crucial role to keep citizens aware about what's happening around them. The expansion of human population and the global village created by the advent of internet, could only heighten our desire to get the most credible news about a variety of topics. Therefore, I argue that a person in this age, should get information from variegated sources to have a complete perspective.

The most obvious advantage that getting information from many sources provide is that it gives you a more comprehensive perspective on the news. You see the same news, analyzed by different news agency that may have conflicting interest, one might even completely perceive the opposite idea from the same news and information. This enables one, to think more critically about the issues discussed in reports, and develop their own personal attitude, instead of dogmatically sticking to what one person or side is promoting.


Another important issue in acquiring information is credibility. Getting information about one particular subject, from many resources, diminished the threat of falling into the trap of misleading wrong information, since you will definitely notice the differences present in the two sources, and will pursue to clear the reason for such difference, before forming your own understanding. This is substantially important in science, and is one of the reason the scientific community has developed the peer-reviewing process. Another instance in which this advantage is highlighted is politic parties that each represent their own version of reality. Being aware of all view, and comparing that with your own experience, significantly decreases your chances of being deluded.

Last but not the least, acquiring information from manifold sources, help you realize some of the biases you might be unconsciously exerting, and you can then act on eliminating them. For instance, when a liberal listens carefully without judging a conservative exponent, he might find out that not all conservatives are illiterate individuals who promulgate violence without no consideration of humanistic values. This will promote a sense of understanding in individuals in a society, to at least look upon more openly on their alleged adversaries, and act with more care and diligence toward them in their future interactions.

All in all, based on the arguments and reasons discussed above, I think that one might be more inclined to and convinced to obtain information from many sources, because of obvious advantages it has over acquiring information from a single limited source.

[chemistrymaste]

سلام عرض میکنم خدمت دوستان عزیز،
عرض ارادت دارم خدمت خانم مینوی عزیز ،که زحمت رایتینگای ما رو متحمل میشن.
این رایتینگ ما رو عزیزان اگه نگاهی بندازن ممنون میشم.

Important qualities of a co-worker

We spend most of our weekly time in our workplace, besides co-workers, and other people, rather than our family. There is no doubt that co-workers’ temper and characteristics has high importance (I want to say: az ahammiate vizhei barkhordar ast). I’ve worked in several offices and I’ve found certain characteristics which all brilliant co-workers have in common.

In the first place, a nice co-worker should be cooperative. He / she must act well in teams. Owning the ability to be an exquisite teamwork promotes the team’s performance. In addition, he / she has a positive attitude which creates a pleasant working environment. He / she is not stubborn about changes in schedules or routines, doesn’t object when his / her action is revised. He / she has no problem with new procedures and welcomes changes when they are going to happen.

In the second place, a good co-worker should be considerate, adaptable, helpful, and sympathetic. He / she is willing to change his / her schedule to accommodate another colleague’s emergency. He / she helps co-workers in emergency cases specifically when falls behind in his / her work. In addition, we might get through a devastation, like a death in the family; a sympathetic co-worker never hesitates a moment for consoling us in order to cope with the catastrophes occurred.

The third, and the most important characteristic which an excellent co-worker is obliged to own, is to be honest and reliable. Honest (or being honest?) is human being’s best qualification. Since we can trust to a reliable person and tell him / her our secrets and because he / she gives the best solution to our problems because of his / her honesty, any person who has such a co-worker is a lucky one.

As has been noted, I gather people who are cooperative, considerate, adaptable, helpful, sympathetic, honest and reliable are easy to work. These group are classified as ideal c-workers and every human can get along well with them. It is said that one has the liberty to choose friends, but one may not have the luck to choose his / her co-workers. Having a nice co-worker is blessed and one must value good co-workers, while trying to be a good co-worker towards them.

[raminziaei]

سلام و خسته نباشید به عزیزانی که زحمت میکشن و رایتینگ های ما رو تصحیح میکنن.
ممنون میشم اگه یه نگاهی هم به این بندازین.

Independent Task - TPO#12 - 597 word - 30 min

It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects that to specialize in one specific subject. Agree/Disagree

It goes without saying that the university time is one of the most significant periods of one's life. What we learn as a student in an academic area has a crucial effect on our future. While some people believe that having a vast knowledge of different academic areas is better than to focus on and to specialize in one specific subject, others believe otherwise. I, personally, subscribe to the former idea on the grounds that focusing on only one subject might become tedious after a while. In addition, having a broad knowledge of different subjects can broaden our views and horizons towards our lives.
To begin with, it is an indisputable fact that although focusing on one subject has some advantages such as becoming an expert in that field as well as becoming aware of every corner of it, it has some disadvantages, one of which is that it might become tedious after a while. People usually want to change things in their lives in order to avoid having a routine and constant life. Repeating one specific task for a long time can be frustrating and boring. For instance, I can remember as a graduate university student, I had to work on a specific field, which was about the effect of soil-structure interaction on seismic behavior of tall buildings, for two years. When I started it, I was so eager to do more and to learn better to be able to become an outstanding expert in this field. It was great for the first year of working, but after that, it gradually became annoying to do the same thing and to read about the same subject all the time. In fact, in the last two months of those two years I could barely do my research because I was sick of it.
The second reason which is worth mentioning is that by learning many different academic subjects, we can easily widen our knowledge, views, and horizons about the environment that we live in. Studying different subjects give us this opportunity to view the world from different angles which is not possible if we focus only on one specific subject. Although one who specializes in one particular subject is usually considered as an adroit person in his own field of research area, he or she usually is a more narrow-minded person compared to those with a vast amount of knowledge in various fields. To give a tangible example, when I was a university student, I used to have a friend who was undoubtedly intelligent. We were majoring in earthquake engineering, and he was the best student in our class. In fact, he was one the best students in our university. While he had a great number of patients and scientific papers, he had a big problem which was that he did not read or study anything else but books and articles related to our major, earthquake engineering. As a result, in our friendly meetings, when we wanted to talk about different subjects such as literature, history, and even sport, he was always quiet because he had nothing to say or to share with us.
In summary, with all this taken into account, I think that it is better to have a wide knowledge of diverse academic areas while some people think focusing on one subject is better to become successful. Having a broad knowledge helps us widen our views and horizons towards different aspects of our world. Moreover, doing the same thing all the time will become tedious and boring, which will discourage us from doing our best.

[mani_faz]

Hi again. This is for tpo 20. I’m not sure whether reason in my independent essay are relevant to the topic or not. I feel like the conclusion part of my essay is completely redundant and has no real value.

Integrated
The professor believes that the way the passage depicts forest fires as entirely destructive devastating phenomenon, is totally misleading, since they are an inherent part of ecology, and most of the times, provide various benefits to forests. She illustrates this point by explaining what happened after Yellowstone fire.

Contrary to what the text suggest, the forest was soon replaced by new species and vegetation, and it did not remained a redundant wasteland as a consequence of vast loss of covering. Interestingly, this incident provided new exotic form of life to emerge in forests, like smaller plants that needed more direct sunlight and could not have emerged, if the shed of former trees were still present, What's more some seed that require hotter temperatures to germinate also flourished because of lack of trees, and thereof lack of coolness they caused.

Furthermore, far from what is stated in the reading, not only this conflagration did not result in destruction of species variety and population and degradation of food chain, actually in some cases it strengthened them. For instance, rabbits and heirs, that couldn't previously forage in this area, because of inappropriate conditions, now could forage easily and thrive in this land. In addition to that, their emergence was followed by the increase in the number of their predators who fed on them, which in turn somehow fortified some food chains.

Also a permanent damage to the tourism and local business in the area, did not happen, as the text prognosticates. Since this fire was just a one-time thing, that happened as a result of a combination of very rare and peculiar ecological reasons. In reality, the tourists came back the year after this incident happened and do so since then. So in essence, the local economy soon recovered and got back to its normal state pretty quickly.
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Independent: Successful people do risky activities instead of doing what they’re already familiar with.

From an evolutionary perspective, we are compelled to constantly settle a tradeoff between acting impetuously and taking risks, or taking a more reserved stance and stick to things as they already are. If our ancestors chose to change nothing and continued living as their ancestors did, we might well have perished long ago due to the dominance by a specie who valued more risk taking behavior and succeeded in their attempts. On the other hand, if they chose to take more risky behaviors, they could have endangered their own and their tribe survival that would have had the same result. Having said that, I would go for the idea that risk taking behaviors provide inevitable tempting benefits that taking a reserved attitude totally lacks.

Not so surprisingly, we are psychologically primed to behave most effectively, when a threshold level of challenge has been surpassed, by what were are busy doing. In fact, our efficacy plunges dramatically if the task we are performing is too boring and banal and present no opportunity for innovation and improvement, as is corroborated by a large body of research. For instance, it has been demonstrated, that students who have been challenged by their school tasks, significantly outperform and are more creative in their career than their counterparts who have attended more easy taking educational institution. Thus there is a direct relationship between being in tough situation by taking risks, and elevated efficiency.

Complementally to the above effect, taking risks is also tantamount to having access to a greater number of opportunities, that one would have been totally unaware of, given that they just continued as anyone else. As an example, college students who take great risk by doing academic activities not directly beneficial to their grade like doing side project with a professor or working in a lab, take a huge risk by putting their GPA in danger. But in return, they gain an invaluable contact with professors, who will be more willing to recommend them to graduate schools and prestigious companies with which they have strong ties. This student undoubtedly, have more opportunities and will more likely thrive in his future study or career.


On my last note, the condition in the economy, value individuals who take risks for better options. Companies who stick to the way business was managed long ago, have a marginal chance of surviving in a protean economy, that constantly changes and introduces new players to the game. In addition to that, it is humans who can assess the possible benefits and costs of a potential plan, and no computer or machine can handle this task, at the same level of complexity. So employees who take risk don't need to worry about losing their job, to a machine in future.


In conclusion, I think the above arguments and reason are convincing enough to make most people agree with me on this matter, and put more emphasis on the importance of risk taking behavior in their lives to benefit from its advantages.

[NAZYCH70]

دوستان ممنون میشم نوشته ی من رو هم تصحیح کنید... ممنون بابت وقتی که میگذارید.
tpo1- task2

These days, in most developed countries, the concept of pay attention to sports and social activities as much as classes and libraries, has become the topic of much debate in circle of teachers and managers. In my view sports and social activities have very great impact on growing social personality. By doing social activities we can meet many new people and make new friends; furthermore by doing sport in different majors we can understand in what major can be success.


At first blush it seems quite debatable to decide if focus on other activities like sports as much as classes or not. ButI think on the whole, it is high time that we recognize the significant of such activities in improve the personality of students. In my opinion doing the activities like sports and contributein social group is more important than do the best in learning all the lessons. For instance when students do some social activities, they will meet different people, go amazing places and make new experiences. During these activities the person learn much social contact and learn how should behave in the society.Thus it can help them to prepare for holding job in near future. It is crystalclear that exercise and doing sports have very great impact not only on human healthbut also on happiness. In my view doing exercise in universities and collegesshould be as a rule. It can be such a rest for students between their lessonsto make them refresh. On the other hand contributing in sport teams has very good influence on student’s confidence.


To sum up, Ithink it is necessary to pay attention to other activities as much as classes because these activities which seem not important have very great impact on growing the personality of the students and make them confident and sociable.Thus they will be ready for holding job in the society.

[aj1367]

سلام، دوستان ممنون میشم لطف کنید و رایتینگ من را تصحیح کنید. لطفا نمره و هر نظری که دارید و به من بگید. ممنون از لطفتان!


Companies should spend money on improving the work skills of their employees

There is no single shadow of doubt that the both technology and science are progressing with an unbelievable pace, which persuades individuals to maintain themselves updated. Some individuals hold this concept that owners of corporations are by no means responsible for the knowledge of their employee. However, opposing to this prevalent belief, I am of the opinion that they should allocate a significant budget to enhance their skills related to their career owing to the fact that it increases their profit significantly, save employees’ time, and attracts more elites.

First, nowadays, the world is turned to a competition field; consequently, the corporations ought to improve the quality of their corporation having direct relation with the skills of their
employees to earn sufficient money. In fact, in the business, investors tend to have cooperation with the companies the employee of which are updated and aware regarding novel science and methods. Hence, not only is not it considered as wasting money, but also it increases the asset of the corporation. For instance, when I worked in the Saze company located in Tehran, Iran, a couple of years ago, circa 2013, its founder held some beneficial classes concerning the Auto Cad software, which has an undeniable influence on its income.

Second, participating in the classes individually, employees consume a large amount of time, which is able to be prevented by spending money to teach them in the corporation. As a case, there is seen a heavy traffic in the streets of the Tehran; as a result, an employee has to spend approximately 3 to 4 hours to attend in merely one class. Hence, he is prevented to work full time there while he is able to work extra hours to do his responsibility more efficiently by attending classes held by the corporation.

Last but not least, to become prosperous, the corporations attempt to hire elites graduated from prestigious universities by allocating sufficient budget on the educational programs as their advertisement. In other world, elites desire to improve their knowledge daily and has tendency to work in a company in which they are able to improve their knowledge besides working. As a point, my uncle embarked on establishing a construction corporation three years ago without any allocated asset for education; hence, seldom did adroit experts intent to work there.

In conclusion, I appreciate this point of view that the corporations should have an allocated budget for improving the related skills of their employees, and its benefits overweigh drawbacks. Consequently, I hope individuals having opposing concept will be convinced by the materials presented in this essay.

[mani_faz]

Hi everyone I hope you are all doing well and preparing well for the exam. This is for Tpo 22. If you can particularly comment on my conclusion paragraph, like how much it serves the purpose it should, I would really appreciate it.

Integrated:
The lecturer presents enough reason for one to seriously doubt the truth of the arguments made against the use of ethanol in the passage. He counters each objection with an alternative explanation.

Regarding the first objection that ethanol contributes equally to the greenhouse effect that traps heat in the atmosphere, upon more contemplation, we understand that's not what's happening in reality. As ethanol is derived from plants, and plants require absorption of carbon dioxide as part of their development, so in effect, the amount of carbon dioxide released to the air because of ethanol usage, is actually cancelled by the amount of this greenhouse absorbed for the growth of plants containing ethanol.

Considering the second argument, that using plants like corn and sugar cane depletes these resources, to the point where they can't provide the necessary food for animals who forage and depend on them, this hardship can be easily overcomed by using another alternative to produce ethanol. In fact, we can also obtain considerable amounts of ethanol using the cellulose dormant in the cell wall, which in inedible and inappropriate for animal nourishment. Thus, using this alternative method, we do not effect food resources of these animals.

Although the text is right about support that producers of ethanol are receiving from the government, it is not wise to think that this dependence is likely to be a permanent one. Since, if the popularity of ethanol as a fuel increases in the country, more producers will be inclined to take part in its production, and will also increase their productions, because of greater demand for ethanol. It is clear that this higher demand will translate to lower prices for ethanol, which will likely make ethanol and gasoline as costly. He points out that as economists has projected, if the production of ethanol triples compared to its current rate, its price will be reduced by 40 percent.

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Independent: Teachers should not make their social and political beliefs know to the students.
Although we try to be as objective as possible and not to let our emotions and biased overthrow our wisdom when we are dealing with a large audience, we sometimes find ourselves engrossed in our personal preconceptions. Teachers are no different, and they sometimes evince behaviors rooted in their social or political beliefs. Having said that, I still advocate that teachers should not make their social or political dispositions know to their student. I will further explain the reasons for such a belief below:

For one thing, students in a classroom come from many diverse backgrounds, some were brought up in affluent households, whereas some have many social challenges with their families. Thus, if the teacher sides with a particular social doctrine, this will disturb at least one group of people in his class. The resentment and negative effect caused by such display of bias, will discourage offended students from actively participating in the class, and will preclude them from benefiting from the class. On the other hand, students who conform to the social view the teachers support, will also lose motivation to work harder to be acknowledged by the teacher, so basically it's a lose-lose game.

From a wider perspective, teachers enormously effect the traits of their students later in life. In student's minds, they serve as a role model of how to effectively establish relationships and express themselves, along with their parents. Consequently, if a pedagogue is not objective in situations which he should be, students will also imitate that as accepted appropriate reaction, and the result would be a society replete with individuals who do not tolerate other disparate views and who cannot work constructively with people with different views in groups.

On another note, the teacher would also suffer from such an action. Revealing his personal beliefs about politics and society, readily allows students to abuse such information in order to disrupt the classroom settings, when they are bored in the classroom. This in turn, makes handling the class, and controlling the students , significantly more difficult for the educator. For instance, if the teacher overtly supports liberals in the classroom, and they have recently suffered from a severe defeat over conservatives, students can use this information to humiliate the teacher if he correctly admonished them because of inappropriate behavior.


All in all, I believe I have presented enough arguments and reasons to support my view that teachers should be as objective as possible, since acting otherwise, would have substantial disadvantages for both teachers and students, and also the society as a whole.

[chemistrymaste]

سلام عرض میکنم خدمت دوستان عزیز،
عرض ارادت خدمت خانم مینو که مدتیه اینجا سر نمیزنن و دلم براشون تنگ شده
دوستان اگه زحمت بکشن به رایتینگ ما نگاهی بندازن ازشون بی نهایت ممنون میشم.


Should teenagers work while they are students?

In some families, teenagers have jobs while they are students. As far as I am concerned, the idea of working along school life is not a nice idea according to the following reasons.

In the first place, part time jobs may affect a teenager’s school life and home life. Working several hours a week, is a relatively a long time. On the other hand, working is a time consuming activity which causes tiresome; after work, a teenager has to sleep for a long time to become fresh. He / she misses dinner time beside family. Teenagers may be almost grown up, but they still need the companionship and support that get from their families. He / she misses family gatherings. He / she wakes up at midnight while family members are slept. This new schedule makes him / her get bored, lose his / her appetite to work hard during the rest of the day and eventuates unfavorable results.

In like manner, the most important purpose of attending school is to gain knowledge (or learn?). In school, teenagers learn how to get ready to enter society and enroll different activities. A teen must study deep and broaden his horizon; he / she must memorize school lessons at home. This process is not possible if one decides to work after school and the teenager cannot afford school’s expectations.

By the same token, physical and mental growth will face difficulties if a teenager decides to work after school; he / she may sacrifice his / her time for sleep, exercise and social activities and definitely lack of these requirements takes him / her into difficulties.

Given these points, being concerned after school as a part-time job, can interfere with study program and school life, disrupt a teenager’s home life and face his / her mental and physical growth with problems. Not to mention that it takes away part of their childhood that cannot be ever replaced. In comparison with the whole life, teenage time is a very short period. I strongly recommend teenagers to devote their time to school life, family, friends and their interests. They must enjoy their best life time; they have at least future thirty years to work hard and to be excellent at their career.