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سلام.این اولین رایتینگمه.میخواستم ببینم وضعم چقدر خرابه.ممنون میشم از راهنماییتون.
سوال اینکه موافقید یا مخالفید با اینکه دانشگاهها باید همون اندازه که واسه library هزینه میکنند باید واسه sport activities هم هزینه کنند.
University period is one of the most impressive and enjoyable periods of everyone’s life .In fact we live in university for years .So it should include different aspects of life .libraries and sports are some important examples .Both of these should be attended by staff .Each one has special fund, but in most of the universities libraries have more share .So I'm going to talk more about them

Library and all related activities have some important advantageous .At first study is the students main duty, So they need new and more references .In addition they need a proper environment to research and study more efficiently .Indeed studying and researching is important part of their university life

On the other hand sport activities have both physically and mentally advantageous for students .First they will be healthy .It means they will be away of illnesses, so It help them to have more
time for studying .Also they will save more money .Moreover, brain works better when body is healthy .mind's performance will rises when a healthy body supports it .In addition ,sports have mentally advantageous too .students will have better morale to study or research or even live .However sports are some kind of fun ,and help them to be more energetic

Both library and sport activities has important advantageous, but In my opinion library is more important .studying is student’s main duty, and it need more attention .Nevertheless sports should be attended too
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