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The student who study from the school to university get benefit less and contribute less too, then those of student who go to travel or job and get skills and experience before going high. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays higher education is more accessible than before. Therefore so many students choose to continue their education in universities directly, though some prefer to work in order to earn experience or save some money to continue their education.
The groups, who prefer to enter universities directly, have their own reasons. First they want to save their time and graduate earlier to start their occupation earlier as well. Next is that educational material is in their mind and there is less risk to lose it by passing time.
In spite of those who go for higher education immediately, there are some students who like to be in society before continuing their education. This helps them to have an accurate understanding of the real world and relationships. They will see how their previous theoric information could come into practice. This even will give them a view of how to manage their future studies.
Hence not having a previous understanding of working area may possibly cause students to learn less in the future. A good illustration is my classmates who received a very low mark in one of the practical civil engineering subjects since they did not have adequate practical knowledge for that subject prior to take it.
Finally being in real business and working environment helps people to find their abilities, talents and position in society not only in the classroom and consequently give them the chance to select a related and suitable course for their further studies.
In conclusion, I believe that despite of the possibility to join higher education directly, being in working environment has more benefits and will definitely result in more successful graduates.