نمونه های writing کاربران و بررسی آنها

[ITALY2006]

Universities should accept equall numbers of male and female students in every subject.
to what extent do you agree or dissagree.

In recent years, with increasing in the number of universities, more people have succeeded to enroll in these educational centres. Whether men and women should study at same courses has sparked heated debate. In my opinion, gender differences should be considered in choosing scientific subjects.
It is undeniable that most university subjects needs people with special features. For instance, civil and building courses which deal with outdoor activities and physical ability, doesnt suits women. Moreover, job chances and economic opportunities are men-oriented so it is more likely that women suffer unemployment after graduation. Take an example, most of job opportunities in public and governmental sectors employ more men than women. Thereby, if universities continue to neglect of differences between both gender. It is highly possible that femal unemployment will rise among educated people in long term.136
One might argue that equal acceptance of male and female students in universities is a sign of a democratic and fair society and it removes existing discrepancies that hurt woman for long time. This viewpoint is flawed. In fact radical causes of gender inequity rooted in cultural values and traditional beliefs which hardly change. People may continue to study at universities, but they do not think of changing fundamental belief and negative assumption toward women. So the effect of educational equity maybe limited and narrower than expected.
According to above analysis, one can say that the equal accessibility of both gender to university course would not benefit women and society as whole. It may hamper the economy of country or does not suit women characteristics and natural abilities. It would be better to cope with society gender imbalances through frequent advertisement or media debates.

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تشکر

[Tarkan78]

Salam and thanks for the essay. The following notes are of crucial importance

The main weakness of the current essay is its grammar (e.g. the last sentence of your third paragraph); check your grammar with penetrating eyes. Do not try using short sentence; instead, join them through the appropriate connections such as furthermore, on the other hand, plus, on the contrary and so forth. At the moment, your paragraphs are rather short

Write more! Your are asked to explain more both in your introduction and in your body paragraphs

Be careful about articles. For example, the missing of the article "the" is especially disturbing

Again, punctuation has to be done better

One more thing on which you have to focus and take a little bit more attention is your style in writing. You are well aware that Writing is different from Speaking. When reviewing your essay, one might feel that he/she is not ready, but is listening. For instance, "one might say" or "one might argue" are mostly common in spoken language not in written language

Wish you success

Universities should accept equall numbers of male and female students in every subject.
to what extent do you agree or dissagree.

In recent years, with increasing in the number of universities, more people have succeeded to enroll in these educational centres. Whether men and women should study at same courses has sparked heated debate. In my opinion, gender differences should be considered in choosing scientific subjects.
It is undeniable that most university subjects needs people with special features. For instance, civil and building courses which deal with outdoor activities and physical ability, doesnt suits women. Moreover, job chances and economic opportunities are men-oriented so it is more likely that women suffer unemployment after graduation. Take an example, most of job opportunities in public and governmental sectors employ more men than women. Thereby, if universities continue to neglect of differences between both gender. It is highly possible that femal unemployment will rise among educated people in long term.136
One might argue that equal acceptance of male and female students in universities is a sign of a democratic and fair society and it removes existing discrepancies that hurt woman for long time. This viewpoint is flawed. In fact radical causes of gender inequity rooted in cultural values and traditional beliefs which hardly change. People may continue to study at universities, but they do not think of changing fundamental belief and negative assumption toward women. So the effect of educational equity maybe limited and narrower than expected.
According to above analysis, one can say that the equal accessibility of both gender to university course would not benefit women and society as whole. It may hamper the economy of country or does not suit women characteristics and natural abilities. It would be better to cope with society gender imbalances through frequent advertisement or media debates.

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[arli]

سلام دوستان عزیز
من با توجه به راهنمایی های شما دوستان، منابع تافل رو چند ماه پیش گرفتم. حدودن میشه گفت سه ماه هست که دارم میخونم. من از سطح زبان صفر شروع کردم. ریدینگ و لیسینینگ دلتا رو تموم کردم. و تمام لغاتی رو که بلد نبودم رو یاداشت کردم و مرور میکنم. کتاب Essential words for the TOEFL رو هم خوندم و هر روز مرور میکنم. برای اسپیکینگ هم ترجیح دادم کلاس برم و هر روز 5 ساعت اسپیکینگ کار میکنم . به جز این کلاس، روزی به طور میانگین 5 ساعت هم برای تافل میخونم. و کم کم تا چند روز دیگه میخوام برم سراغ ریدینگ و لیسینیگ بارونز. الان که با سه ماه قبل خودم رو مقایسه میکنم، برای منی که سطح زبانم صفر بود، زمین تا آسمون تفاوت احساس میکنم. اگر بشه و برسم خیلی دوست دارم اواخر اسفند تافل بدم. چون واقعن فرایند فرسایشی ایی هست و میترسم ببرم!
اما سوال اصلی:
تازه میخوام رایتینگ رو شروع کنم. خواهش میکنم لطف کنید و بگید که چه کار کنم؟ یکی از دوستام میگه روزی یه انشاء واسه خودت بنویس! اما چجوری؟ بر چه اساسی؟ من اگر رایتینگ بلد بودم روزی 5 تا انشاء مینوشتم!!!
کتاب TOEFL Essay رو هم گرفتم. لپ مطلب اینکه برای هر کدوم از بخش های رایتینگ چه کار کنم؟ یه راه درست و کاربردی بهم پیشنهاد کنید (بقول معروف از مبتدی تا پیشرفته).
یک دنیا ممنون

[romish1985]

More and more citizens recognize that being helpful is always one of the greatest virtues. While some people argue that youngsters in the past are happy to help others, I believe that the new generation are more willing to offer help than the one before it, for the promotion of first-aid knowledge, advance of technology, evolution of social media and the expansion in volunteer programmes.

Firstly, with the first-aid knowledge having been introduced into class, youths are now more capable of helping others. Nowadays, a youth are able to save a drowning person. However, youngsters might lack the ability to do rescue breathing a decade ago because rarely school set the first-aid course as mandatory.

In addition, since technology is developing, youngsters are more able to help others. Equipped with a smart phone, present-day youths are more able to locate themselves via the GPS system and then call for a rescue crew when youngsters found a wounded person in a remote forest. Instead, a mobile phone was unaffordable for adolescents in the past.

Furthermore, the social media enable youth to pay attention to needy people. For example, if a disadvantaged group ask for help by posting on Tweeter, the information may be forwarded and circulated. Thereby, youngsters, one of the main user of Tweeter, are more willing to help the group. Without social media, it is difficult for a youth to discover the social issue and offer help simply through one-way media.

Lastly, with charity being increasing fashionable in schools, young people are more likely to participate in volunteering organizations in order to help needy people. For example, there is a growing number of college students who tend to become volunteer teachers in the rural areas.

In conclusion, although the predecessors have offered a lot of help to others, today’s young people are more willing to help others.

[romish1985]

topic 2:Environmental protection and economic developments might be the biggest issues in the 21st century. They are both important because they are vital to human's future and welfare. However, since the budget and the recourse are limited, governments must choose between these two issues. In my opinion, I believe that tackling down environmental problems is of the first priority rather than economic developments. The following are reasons why.

First, environmental protection is far more urgent than economic developments. All the living creatures live together on our mother Earth and she is the only one. Without Earth, whatever great civil constructions and economic achievements will end up in vain because we will all perish as she's gone. Just like a man that needs a healthy body, all the living creatures as a whole needs a strong planet as well.

Second, the influence on environmental problems are boarder and more profound than economic issues. Environmental problems are global rather than local, which means that no countries can be spared from these problems. Take global warming for example, when the temperature increases, the whole globe is affected, suffering the hotter weather together. The melting ice mountain not only jeopardizes habitats of animals living in the polar region, but its effects of the rising sea level also endangers the residents living in the small island near the equator, since the rising sea water could drown them. Environmental issues can not be divided by nationality because all humans are simply entwined together by our only home-Earth.

Some people might argue that economic issues are global and critical as well thus can not be put aside. They may say that if the economic is in a very bad situation, people would revolt instantly, while environmental problems seem to be more like chronic diseases that would not burst out right away. However, the truth is that we've been encountering so many sighs and warnings of global climate anomalies and other environmental crisis right now. It would be unwise to still deny the truth and keep focusing on economic developments and unfortunately, usually the economic developments are even the causes of environmental damages.

In conclusion, environmental conservation is more essential than economic developments in the aspects of urgency and ranges of influence. As mentioned in the second paragraph, how can a man live happily if he is unhealthy? Similarly, how can we live safely and joyfully when our home is devastated by, ironically, by ourselves?

[Simon]

salaam
I would be grateful if anyone could tell her/his opinion about my essay.Thank you so much

Should people do things that they do not like?*

When it comes to the issue of doing thing that we do not like some people believes it is better to do not acts like this( don't do things that we do not like) while others maintain the opposite ( point of) view. As far as I am concerned, the later opinion carries more weight.The most prominent facts to support my viewpoint are consist of improving knowledge, meeting new people, and having more fun.

Firstly, by doing novel staff(?) we can provide a large range of knowledge that maybe it does not happen without having a new experience like this. To clarify , some old people around us had never tried to utilize technology such as computers, as they deem this kind of thing is useless and it is useful just for young people. In contrast, this machine could bring a lot of new information for them. Also, they can enjoy of playing with computers in some areas like a puzzle or pastor. In other example, when we try to do a different work(activity) we are(would be) able to promote our ability to find variety of knowledge(unmeaning) . I('ve) remembered when I was in high school I tried to participate in student election, even though I had some powerful rivals. I did all my best because I wanted it and finally I could beat all of them and had been chosen as a winner, thus after that I could achieve numbers of new experience by being in a group. (The second example is vague.You should be more specified and clear.You said you can catch different knowledge but here you didn't name any special knowledge in your example. )


Secondly, always it is not possible to meet new people and find some friends when you are not able to involve at new activities. For instance, last year there were(was) a situation for me to change my job but, new one was not my favorite (one) and it was quite diverse with all my (wishes) desires. Furthermore, it was far from my home and could be difficult to go there every day. By all those negative points, it got to bring an opportunity for me to meet some folk(informal) or(and) increase my friends around myself(me). At the moment that I am working there, I am dramatically satisfied with my job. I could make a strong relationship with my friends here and have a pleasant time with them.

Last but not least, although it can be hard to interact with new situations(Changes), some research has been shown that it might change mood in people and help them to have more flexibility in their behavior. To illustrate this, few months ago my friends and I had a bored time after our term(semester) in(at) university. So we decided to arrange a new thing in(decorate our apartment with new ornaments and some new pieces of furniture ) our apartment. After that we found our place in different colors on walls and some new staffs in bedrooms. It was really horrible to tolerate there(at first glance) but, after days it put me in a good mood!

All in all, try to do a task that is not our favor is comparatively hard; however, it can be feasible to alter our life in some status and progress many aspects little by little to change our routine days.

سلام

من متنتون رو خوندم. چيزي كه شما به خوبي رعايت كرديد ساختار نوشتن رايتينگه و مشخصه كه يا در كلاسي شركت كرديد يا كتاب خوبي در اين مورد خونديد كه قضيه براتون جا افتاده كه چه مسيري رو بايد طي كنيد. اما نقاط ضعفتون هم به اندازه ي نقاط قوتتون زياده.
چون 2 هفته ديگه آزمون داريد اول توصيه ميكنم تا حد ممكن حداقل روزي 2 انشا بنويسيد. اين رو به جد بهتون ميگم. اگر به كتاب 185 موضوع دسترسي داريد (در كتابخانه موجوده) سعي كنيد روزي دو نمونه از اون رو با صداي بلند بخونيد و بعد در صورت امكان از روش بنويسيد. همينطور كه جلو ميريد ساختارهاي گرامري زيبا كه جذبتون ميكنه رو در يك دفتر كوچك يادداشت كنيد و سعي كنيد در انشاي اونروز از اونها استفاده كنيد.
در مرحله بعد به متنتون بپردازيم.
برام مشخص نشد چرا فواصل بين پاراگرافها رو حذف كرده بوديد. اگر ساختاري كه من در بالا چيدم را نمي پسنديد ناچاريد از روش Indent استفاده كنيد كه به صورت زيره:

When it comes to the issue of doing thing that we do not like some people believes it is better to do not acts like this while
others maintain the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the later opinion carries more weight.The most prominent facts to support my viewpoint are consist of improving knowledge, meeting new people, and having more fun.
Firstly

مردم بايد كارهايي كه دوست ندارند رو انجام بدن؟
شما فارسي فكر ميكنيد و به همون روش نگارش ميكنيد. براي همين در پاراگراف اول تصور كرديد به جاي عبارت عامينه ي (چيزاي جديد) نوشتيد Novel Staff. بايد روي انتخاب كلمات دقت كنيد. كالوكيشن هاي استف با صفت عبارتند از :

▪ full-time/part-time staff The school has over 100 full-time staff.
▪ permanent/temporary staff Much of the work is done by temporary staff.
▪ senior/junior staff I have taken on board the comments of my senior staff.
▪ medical/academic/technical etc staff We would like to thank all the medical staff at Broadgreen Hospital.
▪ hospital/library/office etc staff He had responsibility for training library staff.
▪ support staff (=office staff, technical staff etc) A school needs good support staff.
▪ trained/qualified staff Recruitment of trained staff was a continuing problem.

مني كه فارسي زبانم سريع موضوع رو درك كردم و مصحح كه يك نيتيوه ممكنه دچار سردرگمي بشه. و چيزي رو كه نفهن نمره نميدن. دليليتون منطقي نيست. من در جواب ميگم ما با انجام كارهايي كه دوست داريم حتي به دانشي بيش از اونچه شما اشاره كرديد دست پيدا ميكنيم.پس ساپورت شما ضعيفه. مثال به جا اما ايراد داره.چطور شخص مسني كه از كامپيوتر بدش مياد با بازي كردن با اون لذت ميبره؟ قطعا اين مثال مشكل داره . شما نتونستي خوب ساپورت كني و نمره ي ساپورت رو كامل نميگيري در صورتي كه ساختار ساپورت رو به خوبي رعايت كردي. مثال دوم كاملا Irrelevant هستش. وقتي مثال نداري يا كم مياري مثال نزن چون ساپورت اولت رو هم ضعيف تر كردي.

پاراگراف دوم جمله ي Main Idea كاملا مبهمه. موضوع از دستت خارج شده. بحث روي انجام دادن يا ندادن موارديه كه دوست نداري. نه چيزهاي جديد. من سعي كردم كمي از ابهام خارج شه اما از موضوع پرت شده. چرا شغل دوم رو قبول كردي وقتي با خواسته هات مغاير بود؟ خواننده منتظره. مثلا حقوقش بالاتر بود اما خيلي دلخواهم نبود. كي تو اين زمونه كار دوست نداشتني با مسير دور رو انتخاب ميكنه كه دوستاي زياد گيرش بياد؟ اصلا متقاعد كننده نيست. مثالش خيلي جالب نيست. كي مياد اطاقش رو به صورت وحشتناكي كه دوست نداره مزين كنه تا بعدا عادت كنه و بعدا مدش عوض شه؟

تو نتيجه گيري 3 reasons‌ رو تكرار كنيد در حد اشاره.

گرامرتون مشكل داره.لغات از نظر لول در يك سطح نيستند.آيا هنگام نوشتن ديكشنري كنار دستتون بوده؟ از لغات بريتيش و امريكن هر دو استفاده مي كنيد مثلا Term كه Semester درستشه اگر استايل نوشتنتون امريكنه. كلمات informal مانند Folk بهتره استفاده نكنيد.رايتينگ شما يه متن كاملا Formal محسوب ميشه.
و از همه مهمتر: من شك دارم شما با واژه ي Brainstorming خيلي ملموس كار كرده باشيد. كه اگر كار كرده بوديد متنتون انسجام بيشتر و دلايل قانع كننده تري داشت. حتما تك تك موضوعات رو براي خودتون بنويسيد و 2 دليل به همراه 1 يا 2 مثال براي هر يك بياريد. اينكار روز آزمون كمك ميكنه وقتتون به فكر زيادي نگذره.
در كل خوبه و اگر ايرادات رفع شه بهترم ميشه. براي كسي كه اولين باره آزمون ميده خوبه. اما اگر نمره ي بالا در رايتينگ ميطلبيد اين 2 هفته رو خيلي بايد تلاش كنيد.
دومي رو تصحيح نكردم. اولي رو هم چيزهايي كه خيلي واضحه گفتم. دوستان اينجا وظيفه ندارند و همگي بدون چشمداشت كمك ميكنند. الان فصل اقدام براي پذيرشه و اگر رايتينگ شما ميمونه چون فرصت ها تنگه.شما با ريدينگ ميتونيد رايتينگتون رو بهبود بدين و با نوشتن از روي مدلهاي موجود و الگو گرفتن. ضمنا لطفا قانون فاروم رو ناديده نگيريد و پست در جايي كه نبايد نگذاريد.

شادزي

[Ninita]

واقعا ممنونم جناب سایمون از توجه و کمک شما.

برام مشخص نشد چرا فواصل بين پاراگرافها رو حذف كرده بوديد

منظورتونو متوجه نشدم..

و از همه مهمتر: من شك دارم شما با واژه ي Brainstorming خيلي ملموس كار كرده باشيد. كه اگر كار كرده بوديد متنتون انسجام بيشتر و دلايل قانع كننده تري داشت.

بله همینطوره.. متاسفانه من زیادی فکر میکنم تا مینویسم! شاید برا همین برای مثالها بی ربط توضیح دادم.

كلمات informal مانند Folk بهتره استفاده نكنيد.رايتينگ شما يه متن كاملا Formal محسوب ميشه.

فکر میکردم شاید بهتره همش people تکرار نشه ولی انگار مهم نیست

novel staff----- منظورم stuff بود که اونم فکر میکنم جالب نیست!

گرامرتون مشكل داره-------

خیلی زیاد خرابه؟ یا یه مقداری؟

براي كسي كه اولين باره آزمون ميده خوبه. اما اگر نمره ي بالا در رايتينگ ميطلبيد اين 2 هفته رو خيلي بايد تلاش كنيد.-----> ممنون ولی من برای همین اولین دفعه نمره بالا نیاز دارم و برام مشکله که 3 4 دفعه امتحان بدم تا بالاخره بتونم مثلا 25 بیارم! ولی تمام حرفاتونو یکی یکی عملی میکنم تا روز امتحان شاید بتونم نمره بالا بگیرم{ ای کاش میشد حدودی بگین الان چنده!} البته من بعد از این 10 تا دیگه نوشتم، ممکنه یه مقدار بهتر شده باشه رایتینگم!

دوستان اينجا وظيفه ندارند و همگي بدون چشمداشت كمك ميكنند.-----> البته کاملا حق با شماست و غیر این فکر کردن هم اشتباهه. من فقط ناراحت بودم چون امتحانم نزدیکه و هیچ انتظاری از دوستام ندارم

ضمنا لطفا قانون فاروم رو ناديده نگيريد و پست در جايي كه نبايد نگذاريد.

چشم.

[Simon]

واقعا ممنونم جناب سایمون از توجه و کمک شما.

برام مشخص نشد چرا فواصل بين پاراگرافها رو حذف كرده بوديد

منظورتونو متوجه نشدم..

و از همه مهمتر: من شك دارم شما با واژه ي Brainstorming خيلي ملموس كار كرده باشيد. كه اگر كار كرده بوديد متنتون انسجام بيشتر و دلايل قانع كننده تري داشت.

بله همینطوره.. متاسفانه من زیادی فکر میکنم تا مینویسم! شاید برا همین برای مثالها بی ربط توضیح دادم.

كلمات informal مانند Folk بهتره استفاده نكنيد.رايتينگ شما يه متن كاملا Formal محسوب ميشه.

فکر میکردم شاید بهتره همش people تکرار نشه ولی انگار مهم نیست

novel staff----- منظورم stuff بود که اونم فکر میکنم جالب نیست!

گرامرتون مشكل داره-------

خیلی زیاد خرابه؟ یا یه مقداری؟

براي كسي كه اولين باره آزمون ميده خوبه. اما اگر نمره ي بالا در رايتينگ ميطلبيد اين 2 هفته رو خيلي بايد تلاش كنيد.-----> ممنون ولی من برای همین اولین دفعه نمره بالا نیاز دارم و برام مشکله که 3 4 دفعه امتحان بدم تا بالاخره بتونم مثلا 25 بیارم! ولی تمام حرفاتونو یکی یکی عملی میکنم تا روز امتحان شاید بتونم نمره بالا بگیرم{ ای کاش میشد حدودی بگین الان چنده!} البته من بعد از این 10 تا دیگه نوشتم، ممکنه یه مقدار بهتر شده باشه رایتینگم!

دوستان اينجا وظيفه ندارند و همگي بدون چشمداشت كمك ميكنند.-----> البته کاملا حق با شماست و غیر این فکر کردن هم اشتباهه. من فقط ناراحت بودم چون امتحانم نزدیکه و هیچ انتظاری از دوستام ندارم

ضمنا لطفا قانون فاروم رو ناديده نگيريد و پست در جايي كه نبايد نگذاريد.

چشم.

سلام
من در متن شما كه اصلا پاراگراف بندي نديدم. دو مدل پاراگراف بندي داريم. يا بين هر پاراگراف يك خط فاصله يا همهي ي متن به هم چسبيده و سر هر پاراگراف 5 space ‌ميره داخل كه ميگن indent البته برخي ميگن 8 فاصله سر هر پاراگراف خط به داخل هل داده ميشه.


براي Brainstorming‌ابتدا فصل اول بارونز رو بخونيد اونجا تعدادي چارت آموزش داده كه در اون شما ايده رو مي پرورانيد و بعد شروع به نوشتن ميكنيد.

با استفاده از اين شيوه ها شما قادريد 3 دليل خوب براي انتخابتون مشخص كنيد و بعد به هر دليل 2 مثال مرتبط متصل كنيد. بعدا كشيدن همچين چارتي شروع كنيد به نوشتن. توصيه ي اكيد من به شما اينه اگر زياد فكر ميكنيد و ايده نداريد كتاب 185 نمونه رو برداريد بخونيد و نقشه ي Brainstorming رايتينگ هاش رو در بياريد و همين كار كمك ميكنه روز آزمون زياد به دلايل فكر نكنيد و سريع يادتون بياد. عادت به اين چارت مهمه.

بله بهتره People استفاده نشه زياد اما بشرطي كه متردافي فرمال براش داشته باشيد mankind humankind populace persons human beings

ّFolk غيرفرماله و تو محاوره ممكنه كار بياد.
نميگم گرامرتون زياد مشكل داره اما تمرين نيازه. اگر متوني كه براي رايتينگ ميخونيد با دقت و ديد گرامري بخونيد ساختارها رو ياد ميگيريد و به جاي گذشته گذشته ي كامل نمياريد.
در مورد نمره دادن من جدا شرمنده. در اون حدي نيستم كه بخوام چنين قضاوتي بر رايتينگ شما داشته باشم. قطعا هر چي بيشتر بنويسيد بيشتر پيش ميريد و بهتون بگم آوردن 25 سخت نيست و با تمرين به راحتي نائل ميشيد به گرفتنش.
و حرف آخر : شايد خيلي ها ندونند كه Reading كليد حل خيلي از مشكلات تافله. تا ميتونيد بخونيد و مغزتون رو آموزش بديد.

موفق باشيد.
شادزي

[arazwolf]

سلام ممنون میشم از دوستان یه نگاهی هم به انشا من بکنند
?Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today finding a suitable job is one of the most challenging issues of most people. People especially those who are living in developing countries have a problem with finding jobs and parents in these countries try to solve this progressing problem for their child`s future. Some parents believe that they can encourage their child to work since younger age. Others says that this have some demerits for their child such as diminishing their child`s studying quality. I personally go with the first group because of some important reasons.
The main reason is that taking job at younger age helps children to determine their interests when they are child. In other words, when they work since childhood it brings about some advantages like to know themselves better and following that determine his or her favorite major in high school especially when they want to go college. For example, when a child works he knows in different jobs when he is child. He knows that which kind of jobs attract him more than others and he also knows which one is enjoyable and does not make him tired when he works. Therefore, he is assured which field and major is suitable for him and he choose the major that is very attractive .So we learn that taking part time job since childhood help children to be successful in choosing their major in high school.
Other reason is that it makes them as a hard-worker and independent person in the future. In other words, when they take job when they are child it helps them to be independent and responsible for their living costs. For example, children can earn their living cost by themselves and this helps parents to afford their living cost. It also help children to be so diligence and hard worker in the future.
To sum up, even though some may disagree with this statement; because they see just the empty sides of glasses and think that this event will affect on their child studying. I personally believe that this event not only help parents but also make children strong. What I mean is, children who work since childhood can know themselves better than those who do not. So, these children can be successful in the future because these types of life help them to be independent of parents and even be strong and diligent person in the future.

[Fastronomer]

سلام.این اولین رایتینگمه.میخواستم ببینم وضعم چقدر خرابه.ممنون میشم از راهنماییتون.
سوال اینکه موافقید یا مخالفید با اینکه دانشگاهها باید همون اندازه که واسه library هزینه میکنند باید واسه sport activities هم هزینه کنند.
University period is one of the most impressive and enjoyable periods of everyone’s life .In fact we live in university for years .So it should include different aspects of life .libraries and sports are some important examples .Both of these should be attended by staff .Each one has special fund, but in most of the universities libraries have more share .So I'm going to talk more about them

Library and all related activities have some important advantageous .At first study is the students main duty, So they need new and more references .In addition they need a proper environment to research and study more efficiently .Indeed studying and researching is important part of their university life

On the other hand sport activities have both physically and mentally advantageous for students .First they will be healthy .It means they will be away of illnesses, so It help them to have more
time for studying .Also they will save more money .Moreover, brain works better when body is healthy .mind's performance will rises when a healthy body supports it .In addition ,sports have mentally advantageous too .students will have better morale to study or research or even live .However sports are some kind of fun ,and help them to be more energetic

Both library and sport activities has important advantageous, but In my opinion library is more important .studying is student’s main duty, and it need more attention .Nevertheless sports should be attended too