نمونه های writing کاربران و بررسی آنها

[Matinking]

سلام.این اولین رایتینگمه.میخواستم ببینم وضعم چقدر خرابه.ممنون میشم از راهنماییتون.
سوال اینکه موافقید یا مخالفید با اینکه دانشگاهها باید همون اندازه که واسه library هزینه میکنند باید واسه sport activities هم هزینه کنند.
University period is one of the most impressive and enjoyable periods of everyone’s life .In fact we live in university for years .So it should include different aspects of life .libraries and sports are some important examples .Both of these should be attended by staff .Each one has special fund, but in most of the universities libraries have more share .So I'm going to talk more about them

Library and all related activities have some important advantageous .At first study is the students main duty, So they need new and more references .In addition they need a proper environment to research and study more efficiently .Indeed studying and researching is important part of their university life

On the other hand sport activities have both physically and mentally advantageous for students .First they will be healthy .It means they will be away of illnesses, so It help them to have more
time for studying .Also they will save more money .Moreover, brain works better when body is healthy .mind's performance will rises when a healthy body supports it .In addition ,sports have mentally advantageous too .students will have better morale to study or research or even live .However sports are some kind of fun ,and help them to be more energetic

Both library and sport activities has important advantageous, but In my opinion library is more important .studying is student’s main duty, and it need more attention .Nevertheless sports should be attended too

Hi

Your text got some seminal problems, which should be taken into account
1- It suffers from lack of coherency. You actually need to consider that with reading the Speaking and Writing book of Nova
2- Some deterministic examples should be utilized in order to prove your claims. There is no stuffs like that within your text
3- Conclusion should be held
4- It is manifestation of the necessity of robust vocabulary constructions within the composition

Good luck

[parvaneh66]

.I'll be really appreciated if someone rate my essay
You need to travel from your home to a place 40 miles (64 kilometers) away.Compare the
.different kinds of transportation you could use

I live in the capital city so there are different kinds of transportation to around of city. I have three choices for traveling from my home to a place 40 miles away. Metro, Bus or my own car are my choices. It depends on situation that I choose which method. Any of them has its own cost and time consuming
There is two floor metro to different destinations around the city. That is so crowded at busy hours of day. But in holidays, Metro would be a good choice. It goes fast and I get rid of traffic when using it. Also it is cost benefit. It’s a public transportation and has a low cost and is good for earth too.
Another choice is Bus. I use it rarely. Most of the time those are so crowded and there isn’t any place to sit. I should stand up all the way. If it’s a busy time the travel takes so long because of traffic. It’s a low cost transportation but it takes too long to reach the destination.
The most expensive way is using my own car. It will take too long and I spend most of my time in traffic. It’s more expensive than bus or metro. But it’s the most convenient way. You could play your favorite music all the way and get rid of all people around you. But you should spend more times in traffic of cars.
So if I want convenience and don’t be in hurry, I will choose my own car. It’s the most expensive way but the most comfortable way! If I am in hurry and can’t spend times in traffic I will choose Metro. But there isn’t Metro transportation for all destinations. So if I can’t use my own car and there isn’t metro for that destination I will choose Bus.

[saes]

Can I ask form management team something,
Is it possible to post some good and efficient writing samples which gain complete score in this forum pleases. I really need that guys.... Thanks

[Simon]

Can I ask form management team something,
Is it possible to post some good and efficient writing samples which gain complete score in this forum pleases. I really need that guys.... Thanks

Hi
No, We do not have such samples. Anyway this Topic is for user writing not perfect samples. .This post and your post will be eliminated soon.
Best

[saes]

سلام دوستان، اولا قبل از هر چیز میخوام از تیم مدیریت و بچه هایی که زحمت میکشند صمیمانه تشکر کنم و بگم گل کاشتید... این سایت عالیه!
من دو هفته دیگه امتحان دارم و شدیدا احیتاج دارم نمره بالای 25 در رایتینگ....دفعه های قبل که تافل میدادم همیشه بین 18 تا 20 میشدم......

من تو این دو هفته از کسانی که قوی هستند توی رایتینگ تقاضا دارم که کمکم کنند لطفا....

این اولین رایتینگمه، خوشحال میشم منو راهنمایی کنید .......
ممنونم

If you could make one important change in a school that you attended, what change would you make? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.


If I want to make a big change in my school I would like to ask our dean to hire more native speaker professors. There are a lot of reasons to support my view but here I would like to extend my idea in some of the most important ones. First of all, I believe that using a native speaker professor, students will pronounce words as well as the native person. Moreover, they will be familiar with the culture and the way people live in that specific country. Third, I believe it would be more fun for students.
I have bachelor degree in Spanish language. Although we should pay a lot of money for the tuition, we did not have enough native speaker professors. For instance, I remember that we had three native professors, just, in some of our advance courses. I was wondering how perfect could be our accents if we had the chance of having our native teachers from the beginning of our studying. Normally, for the beginners we had our local teachers without an appropriate accent. Thus, it had a very bad influence in our accent and the way we pronounced words.
Second, I believe that having a native teacher can help students to be familiar with the culture of that country; my case were the culture of the people of the Spain and Latin America. Student will achieve all these information directly and indirectly from the teacher’s opinion about different kind of issues and even though his/her style in wearing cloths. One of professors of mine was from Mexico, she always told us something about her culture during her class which led me to find out various things from Mexican society.
I always believe that participating in a native teacher classes is more fun for students. Since the way they teach is totally far from the way that our teachers used to teach us during our school time. So, it could be fun and something different for most of the students.
Based on what I mentioned above, I would hire more native speaker professors for the university which would help to have better Spanish speakers, moreover, it could make students to be familiar with the culture of the people of the language which they are studying. Furthermore, it will be more fun participating on their classes.

[ask200]

سلام بچه ها خسته نباشين و خيلي ممنون از اينكه وقتتون رو مي زارين واسطه بررسي رايتينگ ديگر اعضا. راستش من 18 ژانويه برا اولين بار تافل دادم ولي رايتينگو 20 شدم. هر دو Fair .بايد دوباره امتحان بدم. نمونه رايتينگ دوم امتحان 18 ژانويه رو باز نويسي كردم از عزيزاني كه نمره خوب تو رايتينگ گرفتن خواهش مي كنم بررسي كنن و نظرشونو بگن.
سوال: اگه حكومت با بحران اقتصادي مواجه بشه بودجه كدوم قسمت رو بهتره كم كنه؟
1- كتابخونه ها 2- حمل و نقل عمومي 3- دانشگاه ها
اينم رايتينگ من: منتظر نظرات سازنده دوستان هستم.

Different people will give numerous responses to this question with respect to their personal experience and educational background. In addition, when it goes to me, I believe which government should be decrease budget of libraries. Thus, people can use from internet and their own libraries and help from their vicinity people to find their requested information at wide range of areas.

Having advanced technology, people will use from internet to find their data. Furthermore, in my country government provides a wide range of internet connection methods. So they can connect to it at their office, their apartment, universities and other public environments. For example, wireless connection these days are available at most public places due to general using of people. Also, internet involves a whole range of general and scientific areas and ADSL connection are provided at universities and other scientific locations. Thus, students are able to find different articles related to their researches at the variety of websites at internet connections of their collages.

Based on our cultural storage, people of my country almost buy their appropriate book and store them at their own libraries. Thus, a wide range of books in different areas are located at those personal libraries. Consequently, people would be find different materials at those books in order to solve their problems while libraries are unavailable due to low budget. For instance, my father has a big own library at our house and I almost are studying them at my off time due to be more up to date.

People can use from background of educational of their coworkers and their friends or family members due to gain extra information when they need. Besides, in my country people learned to lend a hand when other people need help in their life. Thus, it is easy for them to give their information to the other people when they cannot find their data. For example, in my collage, a group of my friend cooperates at teamwork in order to share their information at variety of areas
.
Is this the only solution for the government to fight with unsuitable economical condition? Of course not. Like method are the initiate of better performance for the government to conquer to such as condition. In addition, government can balance their budget between universities, public transportation and libraries or variety of other references. In a word, decrease the budget of libraries is an efficient solution not solely one for like condition.

[marygh]

سلام دوستان
من ی نمونه رایتینگمو می ذارم با در نظر گرفتن هر دو طرف موضوع, میخواستم ببینم خوبه این روش برای رایتینگ تافل؟؟

Nowadays some people may hold the opinion that having a job with shorter days a week for long hours is more enjoyable, but others may have a negative attitude toward it. As far as I am concerned, longer hour job with shorter days a week will be more beneficial for people to some extent that it does not damage to their physical health and their performance. With having four days free a week, people can have an opportunity to take a part time job, and spend more time with family and friends
.
To begin with, expenses in today's world are growing every day and as a matter of fact people will need having higher income to meet their needs. In my opinion, taking shorter days works will let people have another job, especially in the way of part time, so that they can have more income, and improve the quality of their life. The other point regarding shorter day jobs is that people can have a chance to start their own business. For example, they can take advantageous of their free days for managing a small business like grocery, or share a business with their friends, and therefore they can make more money.
In addition, assigning time to family members and friends is one of the most important points in social life. Most employees that work longer days a week will not have enough time to spend with their friends and family because they prefer spending their weekends for resting and sleeping. Moreover, there are a lot of opportunities to make a trip or participate in a friendly gathering that need some flexibility with the time. For instance, for taking part in a family gathering out door in the middle of week, people should have some free days in a week.
However, longer hours a day for a job would introduce some physical problems which might outweigh the benefits, noted above. From my point of view, working in a long time a day can be dangerous for people and cause some physical problems for them. For example, sitting long time behind the computers can cause headache or backache. It also can have a negative effect on the sight of employees. These physical problems may lead to more exhaustion and as a matter of fact a decrease in their performance. Therefore, in order to be more successful in the job, people should choose hours of their work based on their physical capabilities
.
In a word, by taking into account all these factors, we may come to a conclusion that spending more time in a working day is more efficient both financially and emotionally. However, at the same time, people should consider that hours of their work must not be too long that affect their physical health and their performance.

[Nazakhaddad]

سلام
چند تا پیشنهاد:

در انشای دوم، یعنی همینی که نوشتین، همیشه یک طرف را باید ساپورت کنید! اینی که گفتم تجربه خیلی هاست. هم جواب داده و هم اینکه داره میشه مثل یک قانون در انشای دوم. یعنی چه بسا کسی که انشا را تصحیح میکنه ببینه که شما هر 2 طرف را ساپورت کردی دید بدی به انشات داشته باشه. پس بهترین سبک متداولترین سبکه، یعنی یک طرف را ساپورت یک طرف را هم نقد رد کنی

گرامر شما یکم مشکل داره. مثلا کلمه having در جمله دوم پاراگراف 2 نیاز نیست

شما زیادی ساده می نویسی. از لغات و گرامرهای پیچیده تر استفاده کنید بهتره. راستی سعی کنید از یک کلمه زیاد استفاده نکنید و یا از مترادف ها بهره بگیرید.

شما مشکلات املایی نداری، این خوبه

شما تایپ خوبی دارید اما باز تلاش کنید زیاد بنویسید

شما دلایل خوبی پیدا میکنید، اما لطفا وقتی میخاید چیزی را به مخاطب منتقل کنید فارسی نگید. عبارات شما ترجمه مستقیم اصطلاحات و عبارات فارسیه.

سلام دوستان
من ی نمونه رایتینگمو می ذارم با در نظر گرفتن هر دو طرف موضوع, میخواستم ببینم خوبه این روش برای رایتینگ تافل؟؟

Nowadays some people may hold the opinion that having a job with shorter days a week for long hours is more enjoyable, but others may have a negative attitude toward it. As far as I am concerned, longer hour job with shorter days a week will be more beneficial for people to some extent that it does not damage to their physical health and their performance. With having four days free a week, people can have an opportunity to take a part time job, and spend more time with family and friends
.
To begin with, expenses in today's world are growing every day and as a matter of fact people will need having higher income to meet their needs. In my opinion, taking shorter days works will let people have another job, especially in the way of part time, so that they can have more income, and improve the quality of their life. The other point regarding shorter day jobs is that people can have a chance to start their own business. For example, they can take advantageous of their free days for managing a small business like grocery, or share a business with their friends, and therefore they can make more money.
In addition, assigning time to family members and friends is one of the most important points in social life. Most employees that work longer days a week will not have enough time to spend with their friends and family because they prefer spending their weekends for resting and sleeping. Moreover, there are a lot of opportunities to make a trip or participate in a friendly gathering that need some flexibility with the time. For instance, for taking part in a family gathering out door in the middle of week, people should have some free days in a week.
However, longer hours a day for a job would introduce some physical problems which might outweigh the benefits, noted above. From my point of view, working in a long time a day can be dangerous for people and cause some physical problems for them. For example, sitting long time behind the computers can cause headache or backache. It also can have a negative effect on the sight of employees. These physical problems may lead to more exhaustion and as a matter of fact a decrease in their performance. Therefore, in order to be more successful in the job, people should choose hours of their work based on their physical capabilities
.
In a word, by taking into account all these factors, we may come to a conclusion that spending more time in a working day is more efficient both financially and emotionally. However, at the same time, people should consider that hours of their work must not be too long that affect their physical health and their performance.

[sanaz_bahrami]

سلام
میشه دوستان نظر کلیشون و راجع به انشای من بگن، نمی خوام وقتتون و بگیرم و مزاحمتون بشم، کلی هم بگید ممنونتون میشم. جزئی تر شد که چه بهتر
ممنون

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years, there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

We are living in an age which vehicles, such as cars, play an important role in everyone's life. Therefore people use them so much to do their daily works. As far as I am concerned, there are two different ideas toward the question. Some people disagree with minor use of cars in the future, while others believe otherwise. I subscribe to later one, and there are several reasons to name. Three of which—that is—air pollution, time consumption, and less dangerous situation, are the most outstanding ones.
The first important reason I want to discuss is environment pollution with emphasis on air pollution. We are living in an environment that has influence on the quality of our lives. But nowadays people are destroying it which results in demerit to us and the next generation who wants to live on earth. Air pollution is one the most important kind of pollution that can be made through cars, and it causes several diseases. It is possible in the future that humankind prefers to use other means of transportation to reduce the inherent dangerous consequences of using cars. For example, in Tehran, every day thousands of cars are driven in streets which release so much smoke to the atmosphere, sky is like a blackboard in such a day. If someone be there in holidays when habitants go outside of Tehran for camping, sky is fully blue and shiny because cars were responsible for that condition.
The second reason that comes into mind is time consumption. Time is one of the most important parts of everyone's life. People who want to schedule their daily life, use their time in the best way to do all of their jobs well. But because of the traffic is made by cars, arranging a plan is a difficult task which makes people confused. Therefore, they prefer to use other means of transportation such as public transportation to manage their time in a better way. To exemplify, image a chairman who should be in a conference on a certain hour. He or she decided to go out 30 minutes earlier because of the length of route. But he or she encountered a huge amount of traffic in a street which ruins their timing process, and they will lose the conference eventually.
Last but not least is the danger that cars may bring into someone’s ordinary life. Someone who uses his or her own car every day is more susceptible to risks than an individual who uses public transportation. Accident may occur in a simple way that people are not responsible for it because it can be caused by someone else. Imagine a situation that you are driving in a street. Two other cars are racing on the street; suddenly they deviate from their own route, and crash your car which was not in the race. You are not responsible for the accident, but you are the one whose car was crashed, and maybe you were injured.
All in all, to sum up what I outlined above, besides a lot of advantages that cars have brought to our lives, but its disadvantages are more today, and they are destructive. Because of those reason I mentioned above, people prefer to lessen their usage of cars to prevent the consequences that may occurred.

[ali739]

سلام دوستان
ممنون میشم اگر بتونید نوشته من هم تصحیح کنید و نقاط ضعفش رو بگید تا بتونم روشون تمرکز کنم.

Long time ago, people preferred to work on their own. However, from my point of view nowadays working with a group of people outweighs more benefits than that of independently since it is an opportunity to develop skills and it is more fun. Below I will strive to add more details around my thesis.
Firstly, becoming as a team member and working with co-workers is a good occasion for members to develop wide variety of skills including social skills, critical thinking skills and increasing their knowledge. In today’s educational system team working has gained substantial consideration. Children can learn how to communicate and interact with their friends so that in future they won’t face any problem in society. Way of thinking is another point which team working is gunning for. I can remember, by becoming a member of a team when I was in student union I figured out plenty of problems in our campus which I couldn’t find them by working alone. Therefore, I observed a problem from different aspects. Moreover, by this way I have acquired abundant of knowledge form my colleagues.
Besides, working in a friendly group is fun. On the psychological ground, one of the effective ways of curing depressed people is working in groups which is called the miracle of a group. Team working mobilize, provoke, stimulate, motivate and entertain the members so that working is much more easier. Working alone is like snowing under papers, on the other hand working in groups is a good moment to inspire and give fresh momentum to ourselves to fulfill our goals.
All in all, if all the factors are contemplated, we can reach this conclusion that working in groups and becoming a team member is not only a good way of viewing problems in different aspects but also is a good moment to become happy.