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[sana02]

با سلام. دوستان متن زیر یه متن کوتاهه. میشه کسی از دوستان لطف کنند اشکالات متن رو بگیرند. البته خودم قبلا یه بار تصحیحش کردم.
سوال:
why movies are so popular?

سپاس فراوان.
Todays movies occupy almost all people's part of time. It makes no difference how old are you, there is at least one movie suits your desire at any time. In this passage I want to address why movies are so popular. Although there are numerous reasons for it, I will explore just two of most important ones here
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First of all, I believe that the most important reason for movies popularity is that movies are so diverse in both content and topic. Todays there are many companies producing different movies for all ages with different interests. As a result, all people are able to find their favorite one among them. As an example, there are a great number of educational movies that attracts those who like watching scientific movies. Besides, if you want to laugh, you can watch comedy movies. If you want to spend your time to become familiar with tourism attractions you can select a movie in this field. It really makes no difference what is your interest, you can easily occupy yourself with watching a suitable one whenever you want
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What is more, being accessible everywhere and every time is another reason makes movies so popular. It enables you to opt for watching movies as a choice to occupy your leisure time in every situation you are in. If you want to go to a trip you can take some CDs with yourself and watch them In the train, hotel or even in a park of course if you had a laptop with yourself. If you cannot sleep at midnight you can turn on the TV and switch the channels to find a good movie to watch. If you are in a waiting room to visit your doctor you can watch movies using your cell phone. I do not know any other hobby that be as much as movies available
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In sum, considering that movies are very different in topics and are easy to access makes them as popular as they are todays.

[Ni1]

?Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
.One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job

[kran]

ممنون میشم یه نگاهی بندازین و اگه شدنیه یه نمره ای هم بدین.

Good teachers set challenging task for their student
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Nowadays, teachers have been evaluating veraiety of methods in order to provide useful plan for their children even they should use of personal opinions in their plans. While some people maintained that teachers should not use challenging plan for their students, there are holding the idea that making a challenging curriculum is a wise decision. As far as from my perspective, teachers should design challenging tasks for teaching in that not only would students be make a hard working plan for studying, but also they would be make a close relationship with their classmate.

The first reason which should be maintained here is that a diligent plan is provided by set challenging tasks for students. As a manner of fact, students would be face with difficult situation; they should promote their abilities and skills to get better result. In a manner, they could aware from their academic problems since they never experience these conditions. Therefore, they be able to enhance]their knowledge and experience. Additionally, they use of veriey of methods to solve their problem because the challenging condition motivates students to make a hard working plan and spending more time for studying. In the short time this new condition to be interesting, and then they better concentrate on study.

Another fact which deserves to be considered is that close relationship in class is provided by challenging task for student. In first glance students are incapable to solve their problems alone, but they should find a better plan for themselves. As well as, they make a group study to fulfill teachers requierments because they be able to solve their problems by brainstorming and consulting. Furthermore, students for working based on group study, they should spend huge time beside each other; they familiar with new notions and personalities. Consequently, they promote their experiences since they compare their abilities to else: they imitate from their teammates to provide better charactristics in themselves.

To put everything in a nutshell, set challenging tasks is a rational plan for teaching because students learn solve their problem by the diligent plan. In addition to, they make a group to answer their questions which be able to benefit from its advantages. Highly recommended is that teachers should take alternative exam to set challenging situation for their student.

[ehsan999999]

با سلام و عرض ادب به دوستان
what are the qualities of a good neighbor
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As a social species, who are surrounded by their neighbors in their rural or urban environment, we are all considering some qualities which we believe are the best qualities of a good neighbor. Although opinions in this field are divided, there are some characteristics which seems to be more vital for a good neighbor. According to a newly carried out survey in U.S. in 2014, it appeared that more than sixty eight percent of people believe that respecting to people’s privacy, having friendly and peaceful manner are the most important qualities for a good neighbor. Generally speaking, I am quite convinced that to be a good neighbor, we should improve the aforementioned attributes due to several reasons as outlined below.
Considering the first quality, I am personally persuaded that respecting to a person’s privacy is the most important point of a good neighbor. To some extent, nowadays, people are taking care of their privacy more than ever before and may consider some simple questions as violation of their privacy. For example, Last week, while I was walking home, I saw one of my neighbors who was very talkative. During our way to home, he started asking different questions about my life, job and family. It was such disturbing situation that I asked him to stop invading my privacy.
Secondly, being friendly is considered as another important attribute, which make a person a good neighbor. Let us take another neighbor of mine as the second example. He is very easy-going person, who face everyone with a broad smile and a friendly manner. In many cases, when I was getting to work he offered me a ride or even we had many good times we each other going to movies and having fun and this friendly manner made him the best neighbor in our vicinity.
The last but not the least essential characteristic of a good neighbor is not being very noisy. To clarify my point, all people need a peaceful life and a quiet neighborhood, and having a noisy neighbor not only is very disturbing but also cause many conflictions among neighbors which can ruin the peaceful life in that neighborhood. In my opinion, over-crowded family with many young children also contribute to have a noisy neighborhood.
Based on the evidence and experiences mentioned above, it can be concluded that violating people’s privacy, even by asking a personal question, behaving in unfriendly manner and being noisy are the most important factor which may expose the neighbors to conflictions. To me, I strongly believe that to have a peaceful and quite neighborhood, all neighbors should consider mentioned qualities.

[mani_faz]

نکاتی که به نظر من اومد:

As a social species, who are surrounded by their neighbors in their rural or urban environment, we are all considering some qualities which we believe are the best qualities of a good neighbor. Although opinions in this field are divided, there are some characteristics which seems to be more vital for a good neighbor. According to a newly carried out survey in U.S. in 2014, it appeared that more than 68 percent of people believe that respecting people’s privacy, and having friendly and peaceful manner are the most important qualities for a good neighbor. Generally speaking, I am quite convinced that to be a good neighbor, we should improve the aforementioned attributes due to several reasons as outlined below.
چون اخیرا رو گفتید ، به نظرم بهتره 2014 رو دیگه نیارید. 68 رو بهتره عددی بنویسید راحت تر خونده میشه. respect نیازی به حرف اضافه نداره.

Considering the first quality, I am personally persuaded that respecting a person’s privacy is the most important point about being a good neighbor. To some extent, nowadays, people are taking care of their privacy more than ever before and may consider some simple questions as violation of their privacy. For example, Last week, while I was walking home, I saw one of my neighbors who was very talkative. During our way home, he started asking different questions about my life, job and family. It was such a disturbing situation that I asked him to stop invading my privacy
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Secondly, being friendly is considered as another important attribute, which makes a person a good neighbor. Let us take another neighbor of mine as the second example. He is a very easy-going person, who faces everyone with a broad smile and a friendly manner. In many cases, when I was getting to work, he offered me a ride or we even had many good times. We each other going to movies and having fun and this friendly manner made him the best neighbor in our vicinity.

به نظر میرسه به سوم شخص و حرف تعریف زیاد دقت نکردید.

The last but not the least essential characteristic of a good neighbor is not being very noisy. To clarify my point, all people need a peaceful life and a quiet neighborhood, and having a noisy neighbor not only is very disturbing but also cause many conflicts among neighbors which can ruin the peaceful life in that neighborhood. In my opinion, over-crowded families with many young children also contribute to a noisy neighborhood.
Based on the evidence and experiences mentioned above, it can be concluded that violating people’s privacy, even by asking a personal question, behaving in unfriendly manner and being noisy are the most important factor which may expose the neighbors to conflictions. To me, I strongly believe that to have a peaceful and quite neighborhood, all neighbors should consider the mentioned qualities.[/QUOTE]

نکات کلی تر: به نظرم سعی کنید از ساختارهای پیچیده تر استفاده کنید. تا حد امکان از تکرار کلمات quality پرهیز کنید.

موفق باشید.

[Souri_RS]

با سلام. دوستان متن زیر یه متن کوتاهه. میشه کسی از دوستان لطف کنند اشکالات متن رو بگیرند. البته خودم قبلا یه بار تصحیحش کردم.
سوال:
why movies are so popular?

سپاس فراوان.
Todays movies occupy almost all people's part of time. It makes no difference how old are you, there is at least one movie suits your desire at any time. In this passage I want to address why movies are so popular. Although there are numerous reasons for it, I will explore just two of most important ones here
they are todays.

Please see the attached.

Yours truly

[saji66]

Hi
I have written an essay about Films. I'll be very thankful if you help me with your comments about it
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Films can tell us a lot about the country where they were made. What have you learned about a country from watching its movies? Use specific examples and details to support your response.

Films play an important role in knowing about other people, and their impact on the modern life is undeniable. We can learn a lot of things about the others' culture and lives, even in details, which can be useful if we want to travel and visit there. They can help us increase our knowledge about foreign countries, including their customs, holidays, and language, which can be interesting and amusing too.
First of all, we can gain useful information about their cultural items, like their relationships with the other people, especially how they treat their friends and family. Watching a drama movie can teach us a lot about interactions inside a specific society and the relations between different people having various jobs. For example, I have watched the series "Friends" which is about ten years of a group of friends' life, illustrating various environments, jobs, and relationships inside New York.
In addition, They can inform us about holidays, which are meaningful and memorable for many people because of many reasons. Holidays are certain days when we have enough time not only for some customs, but also for spending with our near ones and make our bonds stronger. For instance, I learned about Valentine's day in movies and series, which is a special day for lovers to celebrate their love.
Besides, many aspects of a specific language can be learned from them, which is a great help providing many live examples of applying words or phrases in the right place or situation. Undoubtedly it improves our ability to understand that language in a more effective and practical way and achieve higher capabilities in listening or speaking that. I can remember watching movies with the company of my friends and all getting confused about their jokes, because we could not get it, while characters of the movie were laughing.
According to the aforementioned reasons, They have some advantages like knowing about other cultures, holidays, and customs, providing us a more accurate perspective. Also, it can be an opportunity to practice a foreign language, and consequently enhance our ability to communicate with it. They can have some disadvantages like misleading us in knowing all the foregoing items, but I think that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks and make them a helping tool in broadening our knowledge horizons.

[mehran4iut]

سلام.
ممنون میشم نظر دوستان را در مورد این دو رایتینگ بدونم.
تی*پی**او 15- هر دو تسک
تسک دوم را اصلا صحیح نکردم تا بهتر بتونین قضاوت کنین.
موضوع تسک 2:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.

با تشکر فراوان

[mehran4iut]

سلام.
چقدر این تاپیک سوت و کوره!!!
رایتینگ تی*پی*او 30.
هر دو تسک.
اشکالات املایی و هر چی که خودم غلط پیدا کردم یا معادل بهتری بود رو درست یا جایگزین کردم با قرمز.
ممنون میشم نظر بقیه هم بدونم.
با تشکر

[kran]

دروود

دوستان این جمله از نظر گرامری اشکال داره؟ ممنون میشم شکل صحیحشو واسم بنویسید.

.social activities is matter as well as academic programs


دقیقا منظورم این بوده که فعالیتهای اجتماعی به اندازه برنامه های اکادمیک مهم است.

بازم ممنون.