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[Saman_R]

سلام ن دوباره اومدم اگر ممکنه این یکی انشای منو هم یه نگاهی بندازید با تشکر....
Some people believe that U should not pay money to beggar on the street…Do you agree or disagree with statement..?

According to new studies, every 15 minutes, 5 individuals become homeless all over the world. Reasons for such a bleak tragedy are high unemployment rates, stagflation, drug addiction, and etc… and the effect of these reasons on the rate of homelessness differs from one country to another. And since the victims of this tragedy often will be left alone on the streets with no money and hope for future, they become beggar out of paucity and beg for a few bucks on the street in order to be able to buy something to eat. Many people are willing to pay money to the beggars out of sympathy, in contrast some people including me, are not big fans of this philanthropic act for numerous reasons.
From the philanthropic side of view, the money that someone pays to a beggar could be spend in some better ways. This amount of money could be donated to a charity to help people in need , for instance to people if Africa who not only suffer from famine ,they also suffer from numerous fatally diseases such Ebola, Malaria, HIV and etc…. In US by this amount of money a beggar probably would be able to buy something to eat, probably a piece of sandwich but this amount of money could worth much in African countries who are in need. This amount of money in poor countries could immensely help to disinfect so many children from some deadly diseases or probably could help to provide them, with clean water. So it is wisely to donate our money to charity instead of paying beggars because it can vastly contribute to solving major problems in poor countries.
Meanwhile , from the social aspect of view , paying money to beggars is not morally right thing to do. By paying money to them, they will be encouraged to think of beggary as great source to make money with least hardship. So they will not be encouraged to change their current situation for better and they tend to accept the status quo as well condition. So this situation need to be changed for goods of society, because society does not need some people who think about beggary as a great method to make money, in contrary society needs individuals who views making money as hard working and hardship not just simple asking for one. Since this problem need be addressed and to be solved people need to ignore beggars request for money , in order to persuade them implicitly to not accept the current situation and seek for real job.
In conclusion, paying money to beggars is not a philanthropic act as it seems to be, because this amount of money could be well spend in different part of world better or it could help them to become steadfast and change their current situation.And since you can not guess wht does the beggar wants the money for?for buying food or for buying drugs.

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[Armin1945]

دوستان سلام. اگه زحمتی نیست انشای من رو تصحیح کنید لطفا. من تازه شروع به نوشتن کردم . میدونم خیلی انشام بده اگه لطف کنید اشتباهاتم رو گوشزد کنید ممنون میشم.

#Most of the adults think#Most of the adults thinks that their children should not challenge with financial matters but others raise their kids more responsible for economic issues. As far as I am concerned I strongly agree with second attitude.

First, on of the most important aspects of education of children is teaching them how deal with economic problems. The life is tough and if the children didn't taught how save their money in order to use it for, they will not strong adults. The social investigation have been shown that most of the renowned and prosperous people in a society started to learn how to save their money and how to spend their money.

Another reason is that the children should be financially responsible is that they have to learn that every thing in this world earned by hard working. If they want mony they have work for it. The children should be taught that for making money they have work and they must be responsibile during their works. They should perceive that if they make mistakes or errors, they confront negative consequences. For instance, if a child did not his assigned work, he/she get punished by cutting he/her money budget.

Last but not least, managing the budget can help the youth to become more autonomous. A young man can find a part time job during his education. He can pay his tuitions and some expenses by himself. This let the children to feel independent from their parents so in future they can find job with higher self confident.

In conclusion, although children always tend to spend their monies with junk foods but they parents can help them to grow as responsible people. The children can learn not only how to save their money, but also they can learn how to earn it and how to become independent.

#Most of the adults thinks that their children should not challenge with financial matters but others raise their kids more responsible for economic issues. As far as I am concerned I strongly agree with second attitude.

First, on of the most important aspects of education of children is teaching them how deal with economic problems. The life is tough and if the children didn't taught how save their money in order to use it for, they will not strong adults. The social investigation have been shown that most of the renowned and prosperous people in a society started to learn how to save their money and how to spend their money.

Another reason is that the children should be financially responsible is that they have to learn that every thing in this world earned by hard working. If they want mony they have work for it. The children should be taught that for making money they have work and they must be responsibile during their works. They should perceive that if they make mistakes or errors, they confront negative consequences. For instance, if a child did not his assigned work, he/she get punished by cutting he/her money budget.

Last but not least, managing the budget can help the youth to become more autonomous. A young man can find a part time job during his education. He can pay his tuitions and some expenses by himself. This let the children to feel independent from their parents so in future they can find job with higher self confident.

In conclusion, although children always tend to spend their monies with junk foods but they parents can help them to grow as responsible people. The children can learn not only how to save their money, but also they can learn how to earn it and how to become independent.

s that their children should not challenge with financial matters but others raise their kids more responsible for economic issues. As far as I am concerned I strongly agree with second attitude.

First, on of the most important aspects of education of children is teaching them how deal with economic problems. The life is tough and if the children didn't taught how save their money in order to use it for, they will not strong adults. The social investigation have been shown that most of the renowned and prosperous people in a society started to learn how to save their money and how to spend their money.

Another reason is that the children should be financially responsible is that they have to learn that every thing in this world earned by hard working. If they want mony they have work for it. The children should be taught that for making money they have work and they must be responsibile during their works. They should perceive that if they make mistakes or errors, they confront negative consequences. For instance, if a child did not his assigned work, he/she get punished by cutting he/her money budget.

Last but not least, managing the budget can help the youth to become more autonomous. A young man can find a part time job during his education. He can pay his tuitions and some expenses by himself. This let the children to feel independent from their parents so in future they can find job with higher self confident.

In conclusion, although children always tend to spend their monies with junk foods but they parents can help them to grow as responsible people. The children can learn not only how to save their money, but also they can learn how to earn it and how to become independent.

[raminziaei]

سلام دوستان، ممنون میشم اگه وقت داشتید نظرتون رو در مورد رایتینگ من هم بگید. به نظر میاد در مقایسه با بقیه خیلی ساده مینویسم
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پیشاپیش ممنون.

Question: Nowadays many governments spend a large amount of money on space exploration. Some people agree with it, but others believe that this amount of money should be better spent on man’s basic needs. Which one do you agree with and why?

It goes without saying that space exploration has been a controversial issue since its advent. While some people believe that it is a good idea to spend lots of money on space exploration for future generations, others disagree with this idea. The second group believes that this money should be spent on their basic needs to have a better life. Which one is more worthwhile?
Some people do not believe in this kind of exploration, and they state it is a waste of time and money. They think that there is nothing out there in the space. These people are concerned with their daily needs. They prefer to have a better educational system for their children, a more convenient public transportation system, and so forth. For instance, we have a neighbor who always points out that our government, instead of endangering those explorers’ lives and wasting our money, should build a park in our neighborhood!
However, some people believe that this sort of exploration in necessary for us. First, it will boost our knowledge about our universe. It may seem unimportant, but it is undoubtedly important to become aware that how our planet was originated or how the universe is changing. In addition, recent studies have shown that some of the energy sources available in our planet are going to be finished very soon. Furthermore, the ozone layer has been seriously damaged recently, and this incident is affecting the Earth. These factors are changing our planet to a place which is not suitable for living in anymore. So, it is necessary to find another planet which is suitable to live in for our next generations. This kind of exploration needs a large amount of money, and it is unavoidable. For example, recently, scientists have found a planet which is unbelievably similar to our planet. They state that there is a chance for this planet to become our new home, but this investigation needs further exploration which means it needs more money.
I, personally, believe that spending this amount of money on space exploration is a must. According to recent studies, we absolutely need to find a new place for living in, and governments should support these explorations. However, many only focus on their mundane needs. Next generations will thank us for trying to find such a livable planet.

[Saman_R]

دوستان سلام.
بی زحمت نگاهی به رایتینگ ما بندازین. ازتون ممنونم.


Should university students be required to attend classes?

Among suggestions that could promote (or improve?) learning efficiency, the necessity of enrolling (or attend?) in classes has been argued frequently during the last years. Tradition tells us that attending classes are firm part of the learning process, while, there are some people saying it should be up to the students to decide whether they need to go or not. Nevertheless, as far as I am concerned, no matter whether students like it or not, they must attend classes.

First of all, I must say, I believe that studying out class, saves our time and makes learning process more comfortable. As an example, e-learning is one of the learning methods that doesn’t need any formal class. Students learn through visual classes and using computer and internet instead of pen, notebook and whiteboard. Being connected to professors, students do not need to go to campus; indeed, they can do their research and assignments at any place, e.g. a vacation hotel. Therefore, studying without a real class, will save our time and offer us a comfortable learning environment.

Another advantage of making class an optional choice is that people could customize their learning process according to their own interests and capabilities. Since classroom consists of students with different level of knowledge, one may not learn because of the fast speed of teaching, while another student might get bored because of the slow speed of teaching. But when one studies out class, he / she may accelerate or decrease his studying speed and go on to the further topics that motivates him / her.

On the other hand, attending class at regular time has its own advantages. Students have to concentrate on their studies at a classroom and teachers may give them a lot of information that are not written in the book, such as the way of learning lessons, researching, etc. Moreover, some physical exercises and experiments may only be done at real classes. They not only teach us knowledge, but also teach us how to extend our information about a subject and how to memorize important parts of a lesson.

In the second place, students can enroll in related seminars and group discussions when they attend in classes. They can experience good sense of teamwork, learn how to present and how to take notes and important points in seminars and group discussions.

Moreover, having to complete assignments on time gives students sense of responsibility. Also, sitting at a specific place at a specific time, prepares us for getting a job in the future.

In conclusion, I believe that students should attend classes, because (please tell me synonyms for because: since,…) attending classes gives them information that are not mentioned at books, helps them to be more responsible and on-time, and helps them to experience teamwork, and learn how to have cooperation at group discussions and teamwork.

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[Saman_R]

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The reading proposes three possible applications for "great houses", but in each case, the lecturer repudiates them with strong evidence provided from experts in archeology.

The notion that these great houses were used as residential blocks might sound attractive if we just look at the outer facade of the buildings, but once we look more closely at the interior space, the counterevidence is hard to miss, so if the primary use was to accommodate families, one would expect a myriad of fireplaces to be found on which each family cooked their daily meals, but the evidence indicates that there are just a dozen of fireplaces in the building.

Besides that, it is also extremely unlikely that these houses were used to store grain maze as is suggested in the reading, since if that was the case, we should have been able to catch and obtain some traces and remains of this crop in the excavations happened there. That's really far from the result of excavations done, that shows no sign of grain maze or its remains and sediments.

Although it's true that enormous mound has been found in the site, but that's not the whole story. In addition to that, remains of other materials like large construction materials and sand is also abundant in the building, making it very probable that, the pots found at the site were actually the dishes of construction workers in which they dined, not a sign of huge ceremonies held there. So there is an alternative explanation that clearly justifies the artifacts (pots), and thus the theory about great house's use as ceremonial centers is eliminated.

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[chemistrymaste]

با سلام خدمت دوستان عزیز و Saman عزیز که زحمت رایتینگارو میکشن، یه رایتینگم دارم:
ممنونم

Do you prefer to eat out or eat at home?

Although having a meal at a restaurant is easier than cooking at home, and consequently many people prefer to eat out restaurants, I prefer to cook at home, according to the following reasons.

While having a meal at a restaurant is fast and doesn’t take much time, and besides, one can choose among different kind of foods, food may not be prepared correctly at a restaurant. It might remain medium-rare. Moreover, it might be prepared from unhealthy ingredients.

Meals at restaurants are high in fat and calories. When you cook at home, however, you can control what you eat. You can cook with low-fat ingredients and vegetables. Restaurants also often serve big plate of food, you may eat the whole plate, because you have paid for it! While, at home, you can control your portion size.

At home, family members can prepare their meals and enjoy eating together, which can enhance their relationship. They can talk about each other’s problems, find solutions and enjoy being together.

Another reason is that, cooking at home can save money. When eating in restaurant is fast, the money you spend can add up. The same amount of money that you spend at a restaurant, can buy a lot of meat, fish and vegetable from a supermarket. Furthermore, you can save your money to buy clothes or other requirements.

Since you don’t need to shop, cook, and clean up, it may seem more convenient to eat at restaurant. Though there are lots of healthy and simple meals that don’t take long to prepare. In addition, you don’t have to drive to the restaurant, look for a parking space, and wait for a table and service.

In conclusion, eating out is faster, I find, however, that cooking at home is actually easier, cheaper, healthier, and can increase the relationship among family members.

[chemistrymaste]

سلامی دوباره، اینم یکی دیگه از رایتینگامه، از دوستان ممنونم.

Why people go to museums?

It is interesting to know that when travelling to new places they have never been before, many people choose to visit museums, and they often choose the local museums as a “must-see” place.

Really, why people choose museums to visit? Based on my personal experiences and according to my observations, the main reason is, because museums tell tourists many things about the culture, past, and lifestyle of the native people of that place. Visiting museums helps us to understand history and know more about culture, art and craft of the people of the place we visit. Museums can take away barriers between tourists and the place they visit and help tourists to get familiar with the culture of the city. Museums help tourists to understand local arts and crafts. Furthermore, visiting museums is a very efficient way to understand a place’s past.

There are many ways to know about the culture of the people, when we travel to a new place; you can go to the theatre, church or a nightclub. Another way is to sit at a park and watch the people around you. Among various options, visiting museums might be the most effective way. Museums show you the history and art that the local people think are important, some of the exhibits might be unique in the world.

On the other hand, museums are part of the place’s landscape. Many museums have been designed and built according to historical and artistic characteristics of the places they are located in. As a result, people tend to choose museums as first destinations, to understand the culture of the place they visit.

Moreover, museums give people entertainment. Even if you are not interested in art or history, there is always something to catch your interest in a museum!

As final word, I think museums are an essential part of our life; they reflect our history, art, values, creativity, and our dreams. No matter who we are and what we like, somewhere there is a museum which will amaze and interest us. They act as a bridge between tourists and native people of a place. That is the reason why people are eager to visit museums when they travel to new places.

[chemistrymaste]

دوستان سلام، این دیگه رایتینگ آخرمه (رایتینگا رو هم تلنبار شده بود!)
از زحمات عزیزان بی نهایت ممنونم. (به خصوص آقای سامان که دارن زحمت همه رایتینگارو میکشن، از شما ممنونیم دوست عزیز)

What are the qualities of a good neighbor?

When I remember my childhood, our neighbors are of first people come to my mind. Neighbors are people who share street and fence with us. For some people, neighbors may be annoyance and troublesome; for others neighbors are best friends that are sometimes closer than relatives; this group of people enjoy having good and close relationship with their neighbors.

Of course, one’s opinion about neighbor and neighborhood depends on personality, culture, kind of home (house or apartment), and the situation of house (in country or city). But both points may come to an argument when determining “who is a good neighbor”?

In the first place (which one is better? First of all? Or in the first place?) one of the important characteristics of a good neighbor is “being considerate”. He / she should avoid bothering us or taking us into trouble; he / she must avoid bothering his neighbors even with negligible issues like listening to music or talking so loud, shooting his ball into our property, and he / she must prevent his / her dog or cat enter you garden.

In the second place, “being sympathetic” is another characteristics of a good neighbor. An example for being sympathetic is a situation where we have divorced recently and we are going through a hard time. Another example might be when we get through a crisis, like a death in the family; in both cases, a good neighbor volunteers to help us handle (do you have a better expression in mind?) the sadness and the depression.

In my point of view, a good neighbor should be willing to help his / her neighbors, whenever they need help. In our daily life, emergency situations might happen; which faces us with difficulties or crisis and cannot be solved by ourselves. At this time, the most rapid help we can receive, could be from our neighbors. Since they can provide us immediate help, neighbors are as important as our relatives. They can feed our pet, cook for us, water plants, or check our mailbox in emergency cases.

Moreover, a good neighbor, respects our property. This means he / she asks for our permission before doing something that may affect us. For instance, he / she doesn’t put up a fence or doesn’t plant a tree between his / her and our house without our permission.

In conclusion, being considerate, sympathetic, helpful, and being respectful towards neighbors’ properties are number of characteristics of a “good neighbor”. It is said that one has the liberty to choose friends but one may not have the luck to choose his / her neighbors. Having good neighbor is blessing and one must value good neighbors, while trying to be a good neighbor towards them.

[Saman_R]

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Independent: People are spending a lot of time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they have to do.

It's an inevitable fact that the flamboyant options the modern world offers to us, makes it very hard on us to resist the temptations to spend all our life indulging ourselves in enjoyment and just ignore more critical, harder to manage tasks. I would argue that in fact, most of the people in the society have given in to that temptation, and have difficulty dealing with real life hardhsips in their lifetime. There are a number of arguments that support my view on this matter, which I delve into in the rest of my essay.


Nowadays almost everyone has access to a cell phone by which they can engross themselves in various activities like social media and other social apps, so that little time is left in a day for spending time with their own family or friends or other cooperative activities similar to that. This is really tragic, because in my opinion, this is the dominant contributor to elevated number of people who have depression and other mental maladies, pertinent to the notion, that we have deprived ourselves from more positive, real contact we inherently crave for, and instead have chosen to bond with virtual people who can harm us much more easily than a face to face interaction possibly could.


The second supporting reason is that when we indulge ourselves in fulsome personal enjoyment, we tend to lose the real goal of life, and that's not surprising at all, since the human mind can only handle a handful of matters at a time. So some college students totally lose the right attitudes that ought to have in university to excel at their studies, and just focus on just what feels enjoyable at the moment like hanging out with friends, procrastinating the required assignments and just completely abandoning the control of their personal matters. This result in a number of tragedies later in their life because they've never learned how to take control of their lives and navigate thorough real challenges.


In conclusion, I advocate that we are over emphasizing on the hedonic apect of our lives and that a more realistic, more balanced view toward our lives would be much more beneficial for us.

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[Saman_R]

سلام دوستان وقتتون بخیر
ممنون میشم نظرتون رو در رابطه با این رایتینگ بگید,
همچنین اگه دوستان با تجربه لطف کنن بگن با این رایتینگ تقریبا چه نمره ای میشه از رایتینگ آزمون اصلی گرفت ممنون میشم. این هم اضافه کنم که این 15 امین نمونه رایتینگ منه. تو زمان مینویسم اما برای ویرایش وقت کم میارم. خیلی ممنونم میشم اگه پیشنهادی برای بهبود کارم بدین.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: It is easier for people to become well- educated now than in the past.
It is established beyond doubt that education has always played an important role in human being’s lives and well-educated people have always been respected in all societies. It is also an indisputable fact that in this modern era, the majority of people are highly educated. One of the most controversial questions which is often raised regarding this issue is that whether in comparison to the past, it is now easier for people to become well-educated. Although some people may argue that is a general truth that every individual could get educated in the past simply, others maintain that nowadays people can get educated more easily. As a matter of fact, I agree with the latter perspective and I will elucidate my point of view through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that comes to mind at the first moment of thinking about this issue is related to the fact that the number of schools and universities as well as the number of teachers has increased considerably throughout the history. This has provided more people with the access to academic facilities and as a result, nowadays, more people have the chance to get educated in comparison to the past.
The second reason which is worth mentioning is that in the past not all the people had the right to become educated. From a historical point of view, most of people in the past were illiterate since they had no other choice. At that time, only a privileged group of people had the right to become educated. Rarely could a typical individual go to school in the past. According to our country’s history, once there was a farmer who hired a teacher to teach his son. When the king got aware of this happening, he ordered to kill the teacher, so that other teachers would not do the same.
Last but not the least reason justifying the claim is that, according to recent progresses in technology, it is now both easier and chipper to access to the teaching materials such as printed text books or even the e-books. On contrary, in the past, not all the people could afford buying such requirements and hence many people were hampered from being educated, even when they had the right to become educated. A noteworthy well-organized statistics revealed by a sociology research in England indicates that more than 80 percent of people do not take the money they spend for their education as a strain on their budgets and they can easily afford it.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned arguments above lead us to the conclusion that nowadays, people encounter fewer problems for getting educated in comparison to the past. But that was just a story in a nutshell. Actually there are some other reasons and examples, supporting the claim, which are not mentioned above. All in all, I readily concur that “in comparison to the past, it is really easier to become well educated in this modern era”.

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