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The professor strongly believes that the criticisms posed upon Communal online encyclopedias are totally unfair and in fact are the products of sheer prejudice on their success and their widespread credit and use. She concretely asserts the reasons one might give to discredit the arguments presented in the reading.


The first issue that has been stated in the presented piece is that more errors and incorrect information are found in Online encyclopedias. This is far from the truth, because if we look for a comprehensive perfectly written encyclopedia, we will be disappointed in either online or offline format, and regarding this matter traditional offline encyclopedia are no better. What's more, there is an advantage in respect to online encyclopedias that traditional ones lack, namely the easy process of correcting mistakes online which can be done instantly and continuously.

The argument against the vulnerability of information in online encyclopedias is not true too. Because, there are many counter measures that have been taken to prevent vandals from altering the content and insuring the perseverance of critical information. This is achieved by putting some of the format in read-only format and restricting access to them by anyone. There are also some special editors in each subject that constantly review the materials for false modifications and correctness.

In respect to the third argument, which points out to the loss of hierarchical structure for more important core entries and their salience in online encyclopedias, one can conveniently repudiate it, because in contrast to classic encyclopedias in online ones there is no bound on the amount of content and so the ordering and salience of materials is irrelevant. Besides that online encyclopedias enjoy a greater diversity regarding the materials and disciplines, and unlike what's mentioned in the reading, in reality there are many excellent advanced scientific entries found in online encyclopedias and the presence of such articles is not scarce at all.
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با اجازه از اساتید من هم یه سری نکاتی که فکر میکنم علمم میرسه که میتونه بهتر نوشته بشه را اشاره کنم شاید مفید باشه. البته اینو بگم که من هیچ گاه تافل امتحان ندادم و با فرمش چندان آشنا نیستم و فقط در مورد بحث کلی Writing نظراتم را میگم:

(( به ترتب قسمت هایی که رنگی شدن))

۱: "O" میبایست کوچک نوشت بشه چون Proper noun نیست.

۲: این ساختار درست نیست. بهتره این قسمت را به صورت Comprehensive and well-written encyclopedia یا Comprehensive, well-written encyclopedia بنویسید.

۳: این قسمت را بهتره به صورت یک جمله دیگه بنویسید چون این جوری اصلا جمله Smooth نیست.

۴: کاربرد اینگونه ‌Because برای بیان دلیل جمله قبلی اشتباه هست. یا میتونید نقطه را با کاما عوض کنید یا یک ساختار دیگه به کار بگیرید.

۵: تا جایی که من میدونم Besides that درست نیست. Besides the fact that میتونه جایگزین بشه.

۶: جمله آخر هم به نظر من خیلی بهتر میتونه نوشته بشه.

من پیشنهاد میکنم به جای طولانی کردن جملات و پیچیده کردن اونها، بهتر هست جملات را کمی کوتاه تر کنید ( نه خیلی که Choppy بشه) و از قیود مختلف هم، البته در جای مناسب، بیشتر استفاده کنید.